Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps compare a college cafe layout before and after its redesigned.

Overall, theres a very slight transformation of the place, previous areas have been majorly expanded and staff dining rooms are converted to take away food and coffee bar.

A new outdoor seating area with 5 dinning tables have been introduced in the southern part of the cafe with two new doors opening to the place and a barbecue area next to the south west gate is also made. Tables and chairs area previously had a single bin but now there are plenty of recycling bins, additionally it has got a new salad bar just below the kitchen's entrance gate.

Previous two staff dining rooms are now transitioned into a take away food and coffee bar area. Serving area which had all food and drink is now a place for hot meals. However toilets didn't had any upgrade in the new design.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main change from staff dining rooms to takeaway food and a coffee bar, and you note the new outdoor seating, barbecue, salad bar, recycling bins and unchanged toilets. These are relevant comparisons, and the overview recognises that the redesign added facilities. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the outdoor area has four tables, not five, and the salad bar is along the western wall rather than “just below” the kitchen entrance. The overview’s claim that previous areas were “majorly expanded” is not clearly supported by the plans. To strengthen the response, describe the main changes more precisely and include the central seating area and the kitchen’s continued position, while avoiding unsupported generalisations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall sequence: an introduction, a brief overview, then details about the outdoor area and internal changes. This makes the comparison understandable, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “additionally” and “However” help connect points. Some cohesion is less effective because the overview is vague, and the second paragraph combines several separate changes in a long sentence. The final paragraph repeats the conversion of the staff rooms already mentioned in the overview, rather than adding a distinct comparison. Organise the details into clearer groups—for example, changes inside the café and additions outside—and use references such as “this area” only when their meaning is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “redesigned,” “converted,” “recycling bins,” “outdoor seating” and “barbecue.” These terms help communicate the main changes, and the meaning is generally clear. However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural: “a very slight transformation” understates the additions, “majorly expanded” is vague, and “dinning” is a spelling error. “Gate” is also not the most suitable term for a door, while “transitioned into” is awkward for describing a change of use. Aim for precise map language and check spelling and collocations; this will make the description more natural without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “Serving area which had all food and drink…” and a contrast introduced by “However.” The main meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “before and after its redesigned” needs a passive form (“was redesigned”), “theres” needs an apostrophe, and “toilets didn’t had” should be “toilets didn’t have.” There are also agreement and article issues in “a very slight transformation” and “5 dinning tables have been introduced.” Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and sentence boundaries, and proofread apostrophes and verb forms. More consistently accurate complex sentences would improve control.

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