Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
the two plans shows a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks today .
overall, the cafe has been expanded and modernized , with staff rooms removed and new food areas and outdoor seating added .
Before the redesign, the kitchen was in the top left corner with a serving area for all food and drink below it. In the middle of the cafe , there were two staff dining rooms with round tables. the rest of the space was occupied by tables and chairs fir students . On the right side wall , there was a bin, and in the bottom right corner, there were toilets. Therte was an entrance on the right side .
Today,the cafe layout has changed significantly. The kitchen is still in the top left, but it now includes a hot meals area. A salad bas has been added on the left wall and a barbecue at the bottom left. the two staff dining room have been removed and replaced by a take away food room and a coffe bar in the center.The large tables and chairs area remains in the middle, but the bin on the right has been replaced by recycling bins. The toilets are still in the bottom right . Most importantly,a new outdoor seating are with five tables has been added at the bottom.\, outside the main building
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview of the main redesign, noting that staff rooms were removed and new food facilities and outdoor seating were introduced. It also accurately reports several key changes, including the kitchen remaining in the top-left, the serving counter becoming a hot-meals area, and the bin being replaced by recycling bins. Some details, however, are inaccurate or unclear: the outdoor area has four tables, not five, and the barbecue is outside beside the seating rather than simply “at the bottom left.” The description also places the staff dining rooms “in the middle,” although they were along the top wall. The entrance and new southern doors could be compared more precisely. The main features are covered, but some are less fully or accurately reported.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response is organised into an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the former and current layouts, which gives the reader a coherent overall progression. Time markers such as “Before the redesign” and “Today” help distinguish the two plans, while “but” and “Most importantly” signal contrast and emphasis. However, some sequencing and reference are less clear: the staff rooms are described as being “in the middle,” and the sentence about the new outdoor area shifts abruptly after the toilets. Several transitions are also basic or repetitive. Grouping changes by location—for example, north wall, central area, and southern exterior—and using clearer links between corresponding features would make the comparisons more fluent and cohesive.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
The response uses an adequate range of vocabulary for describing a plan, including “redesigned,” “replaced,” “serving area,” and “outdoor seating.” These choices communicate the main changes, and some variation in phrasing helps avoid excessive repetition. However, there are spelling errors and imprecise expressions, such as “salad bas,” “coffe bar,” and “staff dining room,” which reduce accuracy. “Expanded” in the overview is not clearly supported by the plan: the redesign adds outdoor seating, but the interior is not shown as enlarged. Phrases such as “food areas” and “large tables and chairs area” are also vague or unnatural. More precise terms such as “facilities,” “seating area,” and “adjoining sections” would improve clarity and control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
There is a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including contrasts with “but” and clauses describing what has changed. Most meanings remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. The opening has subject–verb disagreement (“the two plans shows”), and “the two staff dining room have been removed” has a number-agreement error. Articles and noun forms are also inconsistent, as in “a new outdoor seating are,” while punctuation and capitalisation are uneven, particularly after full stops and around commas. The present and past descriptions are generally distinguishable, but sentence boundaries and editing need more care. Check agreement and singular/plural forms, and proofread each sentence for articles, punctuation, and consistent capitalisation.
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