Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plans illsutrate a before and after look of a redesigned college cafe. Overall, there have been significant interior as well as exterior changes, and some improvements after the redesign.

The biggest improvement in the cafe's redesign is the inclusion of an outdoor seating space with a barbecue corner. Next, the staff dining areas have been renovated to a take away food booth, and a coffee bar, respectively. The serving area in front of the kitchen have been turned into a hot meals section.The bin has been replaced with recycling bins after the renovation.

Even though, the center section of the cafe remains the same as before, with tables and chairs, a small salad bar has been added . The area designated for the toilets have also been kept unchanged despite the renovation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main contrast between the original café and its redesigned version, including the new outdoor seating and barbecue, the replacement of staff dining rooms with takeaway and coffee facilities, and the changes to the serving area and bin. You also correctly note that the central tables and chairs and the toilets remain. However, the overview is broad, and some important details are underdeveloped: for example, the new salad bar is mentioned only briefly, and the two new doors connecting the café to the outdoor area are omitted. The response contains 133 words, below the required 150, which limits how fully you can report the plan. Add a little more precise detail about the layout and connections.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction and overview are followed by changes to facilities, then features that remain unchanged. This makes the comparison easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Next,” and “Even though” help signal the relationships between points. However, the sequence within the second paragraph is somewhat list-like, and “Next” does not establish a particularly clear relationship between the changes that follow. The final paragraph also begins with “Even though” but does not complete a contrastive clause, making the connection slightly awkward. Grouping changes by location or by what was replaced and added, and using more precise transitions, would create smoother progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing a redesigned plan, including “inclusion,” “renovated,” “replaced,” “remains,” and “unchanged.” These choices communicate the main changes, and the reader can understand the comparison. There are, however, some inaccurate or imprecise expressions. “Before and after look” is not a natural way to describe the plans, while “barbecue corner” and “booth” do not precisely name the areas shown. The spelling error in “illsutrate” also detracts from accuracy. Aim for more exact plan-description vocabulary, such as “before and after the redesign,” “barbecue area,” and “takeaway section.” This would make the account more precise without requiring unnecessarily complex wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the overview sentence and the contrast introduced by “Even though.” Most of the meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors occur. In “the serving area … have been turned,” the plural verb does not agree with the singular subject; use “has been turned.” Similarly, “The area designated for the toilets have” should be “has.” The phrase “Even though, the center section…” is not a complete subordinate construction as written, and the missing space after the full stop in “section.The” affects punctuation. Review subject–verb agreement and ensure that contrast clauses form complete sentences. More consistently accurate control of these structures would strengthen the response.

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