Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plan below shows a college cafe before and after undergoing modernisation project.

Overall, the cafe has an extensive redesign expending dining options and increasing sitting capacity .Kitchen at the same place. The hot meals, takeaway food, coffee bar, salad bar, tables and chairs and recycle bin was re-organised while restroom facilities remain in the original location.

Before the redesign the cafe had a single serving area for all food and drinks located near to the kitchen. While to staff dining room is a separate place for staff of the cafe. Tables and chairs are in the centre of the cafe. A standard waste bin placed near the main gate and the toilets were placed in the bottom right corner.

After the renovation of the cafe the single serving area was converted into hot meals. Two staff dining rooms were replaced with takeaway food and coffee bar counter. A new salad bar was newly built at the left side. Tables and chairs were remained unchanged. Outside the building at the bottom of the cafe, outdoor sitting area and an barbecue counter extended. A standard waste bin was replaced with recycling bins near the enterance gate and the toilets area remained same

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You give a clear overview of the main changes: the kitchen and toilets remain in place, while the former staff rooms become food-service areas and outdoor seating is added. Most details match the plans, including the new salad bar and recycling bins. This covers the task well and shows some of the precision expected at a higher level. However, a few points are unclear or incomplete: “an barbecue counter” does not accurately identify the barbecue area, and the outdoor seating is not described as having four tables. The claim that seating capacity increased is plausible but not directly established by the plan. More precise descriptions of the new facilities and their locations would make the report more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall structure: an introduction and overview are followed by separate paragraphs describing the cafe before and after the redesign. This makes the comparison easy to follow, and phrases such as “Before the redesign” and “After the renovation” provide useful signposting. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear, however. The opening overview strings several changes together, and “While to staff dining room is a separate place” does not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence. Some ideas are also crowded into long sentences, particularly the final sentence, which combines the bins, entrance and toilets. Use clearer sentence boundaries and link related changes more deliberately to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “serving area,” “staff dining rooms,” “recycling bins” and “outdoor seating,” and the reader can generally understand the changes. There are also attempts at more formal wording, such as “undergoing modernisation” and “converted into.” Some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “sitting capacity” is less suitable than “seating capacity,” “an barbecue counter” mislabels the barbecue area, and “newly built” is redundant after “new.” Spelling and word-form slips such as “enterance” and “recycle bin” also reduce precision. Aim for concise, conventional map-description phrases and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the sequence of past and present descriptions is generally understandable. However, some grammatical errors recur and occasionally make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “Kitchen at the same place” is a sentence fragment, while “Tables and chairs were remained unchanged” uses an incorrect passive construction. There are also agreement and article problems in “the hot meals … and recycle bin was re-organised” and “an barbecue counter.” The clause beginning “While” is incomplete, and punctuation spacing is inconsistent. Practise complete clauses, subject–verb agreement, articles and passive forms; these corrections would make your comparisons more accurate and fluent.

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