Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The map ilustrates the college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now after upgradation.

The main changes that are done is establishing the outdoor seating and set a baebecue point outside the cafe. Although kitchen is remain same and two more entrances are made.

The previous cafe have indoor staff dining rooms and a samll bin whereas the todays cafe have separate coffee bar and take away point instead of staff dining rooms. Moreover the todays bin is comparatively large in size. Also some dramatic changes are done outside the cafe which are seating while the toilets are remain same.There is also margine change in kitchen where hot meals are served on separate counter and also a indoor salad bar is introduced in todays cafe. There is no significant change in indoor tables and chairs which are placed in mid of cafe. The two major entrances are also intoduces.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several relevant changes, including the new outdoor seating and barbecue, the replacement of staff dining rooms with a coffee bar and takeaway area, and the unchanged kitchen and toilets. However, the overview is not clearly separated from the details, and some descriptions are inaccurate: the recycling bins are not larger, and the plan shows two new doors to the outdoor area rather than two major entrances. Important features such as the salad bar and the hot-meals counter are mentioned, but their locations and changes could be explained more precisely. The response is also below the required 150 words, which limits how fully you can report and compare the plans. Organise the main changes into a clear overview and accurate supporting details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response contains a basic sequence of comparisons, moving from outdoor changes to indoor facilities, and linking words such as “Moreover” and “Also” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the information is presented as one continuous block, with no clear overview paragraph followed by organised details. Several links are awkward or unclear, as in “There is also margine change in kitchen,” and the repeated use of “also” makes the progression feel list-like. Some sentences combine unrelated points, such as the toilets remaining unchanged and the outdoor seating being added. Use separate paragraphs and group changes by location or by what stayed the same versus what changed; this would make the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “outdoor seating,” “staff dining rooms,” “coffee bar,” and “salad bar,” so the reader can identify many of the features. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings reduce precision: “upgradation,” “baebecue,” “margine change,” and “intoduces.” “The todays bin is comparatively large in size” is also an inaccurate description of the recycling bins, rather than a useful comparison. Aim for precise plan vocabulary such as “was replaced by,” “was added,” and “remained unchanged,” and check spelling carefully. More accurate collocations would help you describe the redesign clearly without relying on repeated general words such as “change” and “made.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast beginning “Although” and a comparison using “instead of.” However, errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For example, “The main changes that are done is” has incorrect agreement and tense, while “Although kitchen is remain same” combines incompatible verb forms and omits an article. Other examples include “the previous cafe have” and “the toilets are remain same.” Practise describing past and present plans with consistent forms such as “The kitchen remained unchanged” and “The staff dining rooms were replaced by…”. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, especially when joining contrasting information.

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