Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
according to my opinion, the design shows the cafe design.in this design shows some features of rooms.first of all a kitchen ,some space, serving area(all food and drink)next two rooms staff dining rooms, small bin, huge area for table and chairs,and toilets.
the redesigned of cafe improved today.as a kitchen, hot meal, take away food, cofe bar,table and chairs, sales bar, recycling bin, barbecue, outdoor seating and toilets shows today cafe.
in my opinion the redesigned cafe is better before cafe.so community like my opinion and follow my suggestion.whats do you like my suggestion?
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response identifies several features shown in the plans, including the kitchen, seating, toilets, hot meals, coffee bar, recycling bins and outdoor seating. However, it mainly lists labels rather than summarising the key changes, and some details are inaccurate: the “salad bar” is called a “sales bar,” while the two former staff dining rooms and the new take-away and coffee-bar sections are not clearly compared. The opinion that the redesign is “better” and the request for the reader’s opinion do not answer this factual summary task. The response is also 56 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to select and explain the main changes. Focus on a clear overview and accurate comparisons between the two plans.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a basic sequence from the original café to the redesigned café, signalled by “first of all” and “today,” so the reader can recognise that two stages are being described. However, the response is not organised into clear paragraphs, and the information is presented as a list with little explanation of how the features relate or what changed. The transition to “in my opinion” also interrupts the description and introduces an irrelevant conversational question. Grouping the changes—for example, altered food facilities, retained features and new outdoor space—would create a clearer progression. Use linking phrases to compare the plans, such as “whereas” or “in contrast,” rather than relying on a simple list.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The response uses some relevant plan vocabulary, including “serving area,” “staff dining rooms,” “recycling bin” and “outdoor seating,” which helps identify several features. However, the range is limited and repetitive, with frequent reliance on lists of nouns rather than precise language for describing changes and locations. Some choices are inaccurate or unsuitable: “sales bar” appears to mean “salad bar,” and “huge area for table and chairs” is imprecise. “According to my opinion” and “follow my suggestion” are also unnatural for an academic plan summary. Build a more precise set of terms such as “was replaced by,” “remained unchanged,” and “was added,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Most of the response consists of short fragments or list-like phrases, so it shows little range in sentence structure. For example, “as a kitchen, hot meal, take away food…” does not form a complete sentence, and “the redesigned of cafe improved today” has an unclear grammatical structure. Articles and sentence boundaries are also often missing, as in “a kitchen ,some space” and “first of all a kitchen.” The final question, “whats do you like my suggestion?”, is not formed accurately. These errors make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then use simple comparison structures such as “The kitchen remained, while the staff dining rooms were replaced.”
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