Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given maps illustrates cafe of a college how it was when not redesigned and how it look now. Overall, outdoor seating, salad bar and barbecue are totally new. While name of some sections have also being changed.

The cafe was pretty simple when it was not refurbished which only consited of kitchen, staff dining rooms, serving area, toilets and a bin. There were also a space for tables and chairs.

On the other hand, kitchen remained the same and serving area (all food and drink) changed to hot meals. Staff dining rooms also changed to two different sections called take away food and coffe bar.Before it was only a single bin which is changed to many recycling bins. Salad bar is comppletely a new section inside the cafe on the opposite of recycling bins. There are two completely new sections outside the cafe barbecue and outdoor seating which were not available before. Tables and chairs section is one among the sectios that have not changed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main contrast between the original café and its redesigned version, including the new outdoor seating, barbecue and salad bar, and the changes to the serving area and staff dining rooms. You also note that the kitchen, central tables and chairs, and toilets remain. These are relevant features and give the reader a clear overall picture. However, some details are over-generalised or imprecise: the staff dining rooms became two adjoining sections, rather than simply “two different sections,” and the single bin was replaced by recycling bins, not necessarily “many” bins. The overview could also better capture the layout changes, especially the new southern doors and outdoor tables. More precise comparisons would make the account more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by a paragraph about the former café and a comparison with its current layout. This helps the reader follow the broad changes. You also use contrast markers such as “Overall” and “On the other hand.” However, progression within the final paragraph is somewhat list-like, moving between the kitchen, counters, bins and outdoor areas without a clear spatial order. Some linking is mechanical, and the reference in “which is changed to many recycling bins” is not immediately clear. Grouping changes by location—for example, interior changes first and additions outside second—and using clearer references would make the organisation more cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “remained the same,” “changed to,” “opposite,” and “outside the cafe.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main comparisons. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or repetitive: “sections” is used broadly, while “totally new” and “completely new” repeat the same idea. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “consited,” “coffe,” “comppletely” and “sectios,” as well as the informal “pretty simple.” These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy and control. Use more precise layout vocabulary and check spelling carefully to make the description more fluent and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex forms, such as the opening comparison and “which only consisted of…,” but control is uneven, and many sentences contain errors. For example, “The given maps illustrates” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “how it look now” and “have also being changed” use incorrect verb forms. Articles and sentence construction also need attention: “There were also a space” should use a plural verb with “a space,” and “Before it was only a single bin which is changed” combines tenses awkwardly. Several ideas are joined with full stops or commas in ways that make the sentence boundaries unclear. Practise accurate past and present forms, agreement, and complete sentence patterns before adding more complex structures.

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