Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the available diagrams indicates the structure of collage cafe building before and after renovation.

according to previous design there was no open siiting arrangment outside only tables and chairs places indoor at center and remains at same site after modification but allocation of an outdoor seating arrangments make for peoples convient with live barbecue option.

Bathrooms remains at same previous place no changes made only an entrance point constructed at left side of toilets after renovation which open into outdoor dinning area.morover at left far wall salad bar settled which was absent before in building and staff dinning rooms replaced by takeaway food and coffeebar .however kitchen retained its own previous land no changes were made only food and drinks serving spot replace with hot meals .

therfore overall reconstruction made sligh changes in building design with invention of recyling bins portion which was previously occupied by bin. most of compartments like kitchen, toilets exited at orignal place without any changes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the new outdoor seating and barbecue, the salad bar, the replacement of staff dining rooms with takeaway and coffee facilities, and the change from a general serving area to hot meals. You also note that the kitchen and toilets remain in place, giving the response a relevant overview of what changed and what stayed the same. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the new entrance is on the southern wall and leads to outdoor seating, not at the left side of the toilets; the salad bar is along the western wall, and the recycling bins replace the bin on the eastern wall. The comparison of the two plans is therefore useful but uneven, with some features reported less precisely than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response groups related information together: the opening contrasts indoor and outdoor seating, while the next section covers the toilets, salad bar, staff rooms and kitchen. Linking expressions such as “however,” “moreover” and “therefore” show an effort to connect points. Nevertheless, the progression is not always easy to follow because several changes are packed into long sentences, and some links do not clearly express the relationship between ideas. For example, the sentence beginning “Bathrooms remains…” moves from the toilets to an entrance, then to the salad bar and staff rooms without clear separation. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and for the main internal and external changes, and make each sentence focus on one comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “renovation,” “retained,” “replaced,” “outdoor seating” and “recycling bins.” These choices help communicate the main changes, and you attempt some less common terms. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “collage,” “siiting,” “arrangment,” “convient” and “exited,” and some phrases are unnatural, such as “previous land” and “invention of recycling bins portion.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Aim for accurate, conventional map-description language, such as “remained in the same location,” “was converted into,” and “was added,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with contrast, as in “however kitchen retained its own previous land no changes were made.” This shows some range, but control is inconsistent: several sentences lack clear clause boundaries, and errors in tense, agreement, articles and sentence construction occur. For example, “Bathrooms remains” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “most of compartments like kitchen, toilets exited at orignal place” has an unclear verb and missing articles. Punctuation is also limited, so long sentences become difficult to parse. Practise forming accurate past-tense passive descriptions—such as “The staff dining rooms were replaced by…”—and use full stops to separate changes.

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