Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The Plan visually demonstrates the changes made in the college cafe after redesigning. When looked closely it can be noted that many utilities have been incorporated while designing the new cafe. This might increase the sales and indirectly the profits.

The outdoor seating has been added to prevent the increase in waiting times. The number of entry and exit doors have been doubled. The distance between the entry and the exit are also increased compared to previous layout, this might improve the movement of peoples. The staff dining rooms have been converted into different other counters utilizing the same place. The cafe has moved towards sustainable development by adding recycle bins in place of normal dustbins. The new counter for salad has been introduced to avail the customer with healthy food options. Along with these changes the barbecue counter is also placed outside the cafe to prevent the smoke of barbecue to enter the cafe. A new coffee bar also has been incorporated along with a take away counter to reduce the load on the kitchen of preparing as well as packing the food that was previously done.

Therefore through a close examination of both the plans, it is safe to say that the changes made are in right direction to improve the functionality of the entire cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several genuine changes, including the new salad bar, coffee bar, takeaway counter, recycling bins and outdoor seating, and you compare the former staff dining rooms with the new counters. However, the response focuses heavily on assumed purposes and benefits—such as reducing waiting times, increasing profits and easing kitchen workload—which the plans do not establish. Some important factual changes are also missing or unclear: the kitchen remains in place, the toilets are unchanged, and the former serving area is now for hot meals. The claim that entry and exit doors have been doubled is inaccurate; the original already has two doors on the east wall, while two additional doors lead south to the outdoor area. A clearer overview of the physical changes, with less speculation, would make the report more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable opening, a main paragraph describing changes and a concluding sentence, so the overall arrangement is coherent. The ideas are generally easy to follow, and phrases such as “Along with these changes” help connect points. However, most details are presented as a long sequence in one paragraph, without grouping the internal changes separately from the new outdoor area. The repeated use of “The…”, “A new…” and “also” makes the progression somewhat list-like, while “Therefore through a close examination” repeats the opening’s framing rather than adding a useful summary. Organising the comparison by location or by unchanged versus new features, and using clearer references to the two plans, would make cohesion more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “outdoor seating,” “recycle bins,” “salad,” “barbecue” and “take away counter,” which makes the main subject clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “sustainable development” and “functionality.” Some choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing a plan: “utilities” is not a suitable label for the cafe facilities, “different other counters” is awkward, and “distance between the entry and the exit” does not accurately describe the layout change. “Recycle bins” is understandable, but “recycling bins” is the natural form. More precise spatial and plan-description vocabulary, such as “replaced by,” “located along” and “remained unchanged,” would improve accuracy and flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “while,” “compared to” and “to prevent,” and the meaning is generally clear. Several sentences are controlled, such as “The staff dining rooms have been converted into different other counters utilizing the same place.” However, some errors remain in agreement, articles and sentence construction. For example, “The number of entry and exit doors have been doubled” should use “has,” and “The distance between the entry and the exit are” should use “is.” The opening “When looked closely it can be noted” is an awkward reduced clause; “On closer inspection, it can be seen that…” is more grammatical. These issues do not usually obstruct understanding, but more consistent control of such structures is needed.

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