Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This plan shows a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now, if i compare both plans in the first one cafe before redesign there were limited options in the cafe like if i say, in the start of the cafe there is a kitchen serving area includes ( all food and drink items) then came to the staff dining rooms there are tables and chairs where anyone can sit and enjoy their meal and have fun, furthermore in the right corner there is a toilet also but in the cafe as we can see it looks like very small and conjusted on the other hand, cafe today it looks more better than the previous one because in the kitchen there are so many sufficient options people can look into, there is salad bar barbecue these options are like people can make their own meal by their own choice, coffee bar is also available and now a days people love coffee this will increase their sales they have outdoor seating also if anyone wants to sit in fresh air they prefer this too overall i can say cafe today is way more better.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad change that the café today offers more facilities, and you mention several relevant features, including the salad bar, coffee bar, barbecue and outdoor seating. However, the account is only partly focused on what the plans show: it gives opinions about customers making meals and increasing sales rather than clearly describing the layout. Some details are inaccurate or unclear—for example, the barbecue is outside, not an option in the kitchen, and the staff dining rooms are not simply general seating. Important changes such as the take-away section and recycling bins are omitted. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the main alterations, then compare the old and new layouts using accurate locations and features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic chronological comparison, moving from the earlier café to the current one, and linking phrases such as “on the other hand” and “overall” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, nearly all the information is packed into one long sentence-like paragraph, so the progression is difficult to follow. Connectors such as “then” and “furthermore” do not consistently clarify the spatial relationships, and the repeated “there is” structure makes the account feel list-like. Organise the response into clear paragraphs—for example, an overview followed by a description of the former and current layouts—and use precise references such as “along the northern wall” or “outside the southern entrance.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “kitchen,” “staff dining rooms,” “salad bar” and “outdoor seating,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are informal, repetitive or imprecise for an academic plan description. Phrases such as “more better,” “so many sufficient options” and “have fun” do not describe the layout accurately or naturally; “conjusted” is also misspelled. The response relies heavily on “cafe,” “options” and “there is.” Build a more precise set of terms for changes and locations, such as “was replaced by,” “was added,” “adjacent to” and “in the south-west corner,” and avoid unsupported claims about sales or customer preferences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to connect ideas with longer structures, using phrases such as “because,” “if anyone wants to sit in fresh air” and “on the other hand.” However, these attempts often produce run-on sentences, with several independent ideas joined by commas and no clear sentence boundaries. There are also recurring errors in articles, agreement and verb forms, as in “in the start of the cafe,” “there is a kitchen serving area includes” and “these options are like people can make.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including the lowercase “i.” Use shorter, complete sentences and check that each clause has a clear subject and verb; practise accurate past and present forms when comparing the two plans.

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