Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two visuals illustrates the information about cafe before redesign and cafe today.

overall, the intial design was considerably allocated much space to its staff andfor public having onlt the one massive hall while the cafe today is much more organize and unsed space is well structured and additionally introducing outdoor seating.

Cafe before redsign have bin and toilets as on side of it, then hall have tables and chairs and on the right middle side of wall have two dining rooms for staffs.By the corner have the serving area for all food and drinks along with kitchen aside.

On the other hand cafe appears more well structured and showing effcinet usage of space,bin was replaced by Recycling bins as usally aside of toilets.Previously staff dining rooms are now use as take away food and another room as coffe bar. At the end of hsll opposite to recycle bins introduce salad bar and the serving food area is now serving just Hot meals.one of the major new development is by introducing "Outdoor seating" which have two door one is near side of toilets and another is on side of salad bar , out doorseating consitute a better seating aera with a barbecue section.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main transformation clearly: the former staff dining rooms become takeaway and coffee areas, the serving counter is narrowed to hot meals, and outdoor seating with a barbecue is added. You also note that the kitchen and toilets remain and that the bin becomes recycling bins. This gives a relevant overview and covers the key changes. However, some spatial details are inaccurate or unclear: the two new doors lead from the southern wall to the outdoor area, rather than one being near the toilets and the other near the salad bar. The description of the original layout is also difficult to follow, particularly the location of the staff rooms and serving area. More precise comparisons of the unchanged central seating area and the new salad bar would make the account more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the original and current layouts. The contrastive opening “On the other hand” helps signal the move to the redesigned café, and the main changes are generally presented in a sensible order. This coherent overall arrangement is a strength. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes hard to follow because several features are packed into long sentences, especially the final sentence about the outdoor area. Some references, such as “by the corner” and “at the end of hall,” do not make the locations clear, and linking is occasionally awkward. To strengthen cohesion, group features by location or by what changed, and use shorter sentences with explicit references to the north, south, and sides of the plan.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “staff dining rooms,” “tables and chairs,” “recycling bins,” “salad bar,” and “outdoor seating,” which helps convey the plan changes. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “major new development.” However, the range and control are limited by frequent spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word choices, including “intial,” “redsign,” “effcinet usage,” “unsed space,” and “consitute.” Phrases such as “allocated much space to its staff” and “better seating area” are also vague for describing a floor plan. Use accurate, standard terms such as “converted,” “replaced,” and “added,” and check spelling carefully so the reader can focus on the comparisons rather than decoding the wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a contrast between the two plans and a sentence describing several changes. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors frequently affect clarity. For example, “The two visuals illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Previously staff dining rooms are now use” has an incorrect verb form. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “cafe before redesign” and the long final sentence, which joins several ideas without clear punctuation. The overview sentence is difficult to parse because its clauses are not grammatically connected. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “while,” “whereas,” or “which.” Check agreement, tense, articles, and punctuation during revision.

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