Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the plans shows design change in the collage cafe and give new looks for cafe.

Overall, it is the clear the graph the large change in outdoor cafe.

In addition, some seets and Barbecue have been added to the outdoor area, whereas, the kitchen replaced serving area with hot maels .

According to what is shown ,some dors added behind toilets and added salad bar indoor also added coffe bar and take away food next to kitchen replecement staff dining rooms.

In right cafe removed Bin and replacement to recycling bins, and added outdoor seating next to barbecue .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several genuine changes, including the new outdoor seating and barbecue, the salad bar, and recycling bins replacing the bin. However, the response only partially summarises the plans: it gives little detail about the unchanged features, such as the central tables and chairs and toilets, and the overview that there is a “large change in outdoor cafe” is unclear. Some details are inaccurate or confusing: the kitchen did not replace the serving area; its counter is now labelled “Hot meals,” while the kitchen remains. The former staff dining rooms became takeaway and coffee-bar sections. The response is also 51 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to select and explain the main comparisons. Organise a fuller summary around the overall changes and key features that stayed the same.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to group information, beginning with an overview and then mentioning several changes. Linking words such as “Overall,” “In addition,” and “whereas” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the details are compressed into long, loosely connected sentences, and the final sentence repeats the outdoor-seating point. Punctuation around connectors is also awkward, as in “whereas, the kitchen…” The phrase “According to what is shown” does not clarify how the next details relate to one another. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and specific changes, then group details by location or by what was replaced and added.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant plan vocabulary, including “outdoor seating,” “salad bar,” “recycling bins,” and “staff dining rooms,” so the reader can recognise several features. However, the range is limited and some word choices are inaccurate or unclear: “graph” is not suitable for a plan, “collage cafe” is unclear, and “large change in outdoor cafe” does not precisely describe the redesign. Spelling errors such as “seets,” “maels,” “dors,” and “replecement” also make parts harder to understand. Aim for precise terms such as “layout,” “redesigned,” and “counter,” and check spelling carefully. Vary verbs for changes, for example, “was replaced by,” “was added,” and “remained.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form connected sentences and use a contrast clause with “whereas,” but grammatical control is inconsistent and the range of sentence structures is limited. The opening has a subject–verb agreement error: “the plans shows” should be “the plans show.” In “it is the clear the graph,” the article and sentence structure are faulty, while “the kitchen replaced serving area with hot maels” does not clearly express the relationship between the kitchen and its counter. Several clauses are joined without clear grammatical links, and punctuation is often misplaced, as in “whereas,” and “shown ,some.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related details using clear relative or contrast clauses.

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