Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The map illustrates a college cafe befor redesign and how it look curentlly. Overall, cafe has been extended and recognize accounted a outdoor setting with berbecue and also kitchen was still after the redesign. some area relocated and replaced

It is quite evident from that map that, a serving area college cafe replace to hot meals. In contrast, Kitchen and tables chairs are stile on the same place. In the hall of cafe before was showed staff dining rooms and in the corner see the bin and toilets.

Furthermore, after redesign the cafe have contributed outdoor seating, with tables and chairs also formed a berbecue place.

In new college cafe they had made up salad bar. Staff dining room was replace and now had taka away food and coffee bar on this place. After redesign the toilets and recycling bins places should have beeb extented. After redesign has been mad up a salad bar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the new outdoor seating and barbecue, the conversion of the staff dining rooms into takeaway and coffee areas, and the addition of a salad bar. You also correctly note that the kitchen, central tables and chairs, and toilets remain. This gives the reader a relevant account of both plans. However, the overview is unclear (“cafe has been extended and recognize accounted a outdoor setting”), and some details are imprecise: the recycling bins replace the single bin in its position rather than the area being “extended.” The serving counter’s change to hot meals is mentioned, but other useful comparisons, such as the new southern doors and the salad bar’s location, could be explained more clearly. A concise, accurate overview and fuller description of key locations would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and uses basic signposts such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” and “Furthermore,” so there is an attempt to organise the comparison. However, the progression is difficult to follow because related details are scattered or repeated. The salad bar is mentioned twice, and the final sentence repeats an earlier point rather than adding information. Some references are also unclear: “on this place” does not precisely identify where the new takeaway and coffee areas are, while “that map” and “the hall” do little to guide the reader through the plans. Grouping the changes by location or by what stayed versus what changed, and using clearer links between those groups, would make the account easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “serving area,” “staff dining rooms,” “outdoor seating,” “salad bar,” and “recycling bins.” These terms show an effort to describe the plan rather than relying only on general language. However, inaccurate spelling and word choice often make the description less clear, as in “befor,” “curentlly,” “berbecue,” and “taka away.” Several phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “recognize accounted a outdoor setting” and “made up a salad bar.” The range is therefore limited in effective use, even though relevant vocabulary is present. Check spelling carefully and choose standard map-description phrases such as “was replaced by,” “was added,” and “is located along.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and make comparisons, for example, “In contrast, Kitchen and tables chairs are stile on the same place.” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, which makes relationships between ideas hard to understand. Examples include “Overall, cafe has been extended,” “the cafe have contributed outdoor seating,” and “the toilets and recycling bins places should have beeb extented.” These show problems with articles, subject–verb agreement, verb forms and sentence construction. Some sentences also lack clear punctuation or a complete grammatical pattern. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses such as “while” or “whereas”; this will help you express comparisons without losing clarity.

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