Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The map shows the college cafe re-designed,and no doubt it looks so nicely and beneficial for the whole college customers.

Initially,the cafe before the designed looks like so simply and beautiful.As the top right side,a cabin shows the kitchen and serving area,then next into the whole area of the cafe which consist of three small cabins,two at the down of kitchen area and named as staff dining rooms.At the other bottom left corner small cabin named as toilets.The upper right side of the toilets area have a bin.That's the structure of coolege cafe before the re-designed.

Consequntly,now today when the cafe has redesigned,looking so eligate.The top of the cabin which has the same name kitchen,but one major change in this box are the new point has designed like hot meals.On the down the whole area of the cafetaria are some different graceful changes.The two boxes cabin are now same as but the point of named it's different,and named as coffee bar or take away food.At the right corner of the wholr table and chairs area are now as same but in the straight corner are made new box issalaad bae,and it's opposite recyclling bins,and goes down the toilets cabin are now same as.

The outside of the cafe have made arrange outdoor seating area and straight right corner one new box is the barbecue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the before-and-after comparison and report several relevant changes, including the new hot-meals counter, coffee bar and takeaway section, salad bar, recycling bins, and outdoor seating with a barbecue. You also note that the kitchen and toilets remain. However, some key details are misread or unclear: the kitchen is in the upper-left, not the “top right,” and the earlier layout has two staff dining rooms, not three cabins. The overview is also limited; it would be clearer to state that the redesign adds food-service options and expands seating outdoors while retaining the central seating area and toilets. A few changes, such as the new southern doors and the position of the barbecue, need more precise reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic chronological structure, moving from the former café to its current layout, and paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages. Some linking expressions, such as “Initially” and “Consequently,” signal the sequence. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several features are crowded into long, loosely connected sentences. Phrases such as “At the right corner of the wholr table and chairs area” do not make the location clear, and “now same as” is repeated without specifying what remains unchanged. Organise the description by areas—for example, the north and west sides, the central space, then the exterior—and use clear references to connect each comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to describing a plan, including “serving area,” “staff dining rooms,” “outdoor seating area,” and “recycling bins.” However, the range is limited and many word choices or spellings make the description difficult to understand, such as “eligate,” “cafetaria,” “issalaad bae,” and “recyclling.” Several evaluative words, including “beautiful,” “graceful,” and “beneficial,” are not useful for objectively reporting a layout. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “the down the whole area.” Use precise location and change vocabulary instead, and check spelling carefully. This would make the information more accurate and easier for the reader to interpret.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine information using longer sentences, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and many sentences contain errors that make relationships between features unclear. For example, “the cafe before the designed looks like so simply” has an incomplete and faulty structure, while “the whole area of the cafe which consist” has a relative clause and subject–verb agreement problem. Tense and verb forms also shift, as in “now today when the cafe has redesigned, looking so eligate.” Punctuation is often missing after introductory phrases, and several sentences run together. Practise accurate simple present and past forms for describing plans, then add controlled comparisons using structures such as “whereas” and “while.”

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