Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The plan below show a collage cafe before it was redesigneed and how it looks

So the cafe designe before redesigne the graphe show the kitchen behind the serving area where all the food and drinks are served to the customers tables and chairs are located in front of staff dining rooms near the entrance there is a recycling bins and at the same location we can see the toilets over there this is basically the structure and designe before its redesigne .

Cafe after redesigne is basically the upgarded version of cafe before they make some majure changes in cafe today but the kitchen is still on the same location but we can see that they made some chnages in serving are we can just chose the hot meals from serving are they saprate the salad bar its just near to the kitchen entance cafe before at the staff dining rooms they devide it into two sections take away food and coffee bar the toilets and recycling bins are still on the same location they add some outdoor seating and Barbecue section and over all it looks good

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main purpose of the plans and report several important changes: the kitchen stays in the same place, the former staff dining rooms become takeaway and coffee areas, and outdoor seating with a barbecue is added. However, the comparison is only partly complete and some details are inaccurate. In the original plan, the bin is not recycling bins, and the toilets are in the bottom-right corner rather than at the same location as the bin. The new salad bar is on the western wall, but its position is described unclearly as near the kitchen entrance. There is also no clear overview highlighting the main transformation. To strengthen the report, summarise the overall changes first, then describe the key features accurately and systematically.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a basic before-and-after order, which helps the reader recognise that you are comparing the two plans. However, it is presented as two long paragraphs with little internal organisation, and the second paragraph combines many changes in one sentence. Linking phrases such as “but” and “and” are repeated, while “So” and “over all” do not create a clear progression between an overview and supporting details. Some references are also unclear, for example “at the same location” does not make clear which feature you mean. Use a short introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the original and redesigned café. Group related changes and use precise references such as “along the eastern wall” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “kitchen,” “serving area,” “staff dining rooms,” “salad bar,” and “outdoor seating.” This gives the reader a basic understanding of the changes. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or imprecise choices make the report less clear, including “redesigneed,” “upgarded,” “majure,” and “devide.” Phrases such as “the graphe show” and “we can just chose” are not natural for a formal map description. Aim for accurate, neutral language and vary verbs used to report changes, such as “was replaced by,” “was added,” and “remained.” Check spelling carefully, especially for key terms that carry the meaning of your comparison.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect several ideas in longer sentences, but these structures are often difficult to follow because of frequent errors in sentence formation, agreement, and punctuation. For example, “The plan below show” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the kitchen is still on the same location but we can see that they made some changes” combines clauses without clear punctuation. Articles and prepositions are also inconsistent, as in “near the entrance” and “on the same location.” Most sentences rely on simple present forms, with limited control of past forms needed to describe the former layout. Use shorter, complete sentences and practise past passive forms such as “The staff rooms were replaced by…” alongside accurate present forms for features that remain.

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