Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The cafe were change the theam and redesigned the formulation they start the first kitchen and then the meal coat next the take away food shop in college cafe then newly open the salad bar to serve the salad for student they also serve the salad to tearchers they also reneuate the tables and chair basically the seating arregement to the cafe they also the outdoor seating area to relax or enjoy our meal or taking to our friends they also have barbecue they increase the growth of money or inhance the facility of cafe they also have a toilet. They are mainly newly open and chill area or relaxing the people to cafe area.The coffee bar also serve the cold coffee or hot choclate to people or college student they enjoying the new theam or cafe area they also have the recycling bins to get or through the waste product garbage.They have fantasting space to enjoy or chilling the cafe area.They look amazing and looks crazy they have relevant space or area must be crazy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several genuine changes, including the new salad bar, outdoor seating, barbecue, coffee bar and recycling bins, so the response is connected to the plans. However, it does not clearly summarise the main before-and-after features: the former staff dining rooms becoming takeaway and coffee areas, the serving counter changing to hot meals, and the toilets and central seating remaining are not explained accurately or systematically. Instead, much of the response describes imagined benefits, such as increasing money, serving teachers, or offering particular drinks, which the plans do not show. There is also no clear overview of the redesign. To improve, focus on the most important spatial changes and unchanged features, and avoid adding unsupported details or opinions about how the café feels or looks.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

Some related changes are grouped together, and words such as “also” and “then” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the response is essentially one long sequence, with no clear introduction, overview, or organised comparison between the former and current layouts. Repeated links such as “they also” make the progression difficult to follow, while the reader cannot tell which features belong to the old plan and which to the new one. The final comments about the café looking “amazing” and “crazy” do not provide a clear conclusion. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and key changes, and organise details by location or by what was removed, added, and retained. This would make the comparison easier to understand.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “kitchen,” “salad bar,” “outdoor seating,” “barbecue,” and “recycling bins,” which helps identify several features. However, the range is basic and often repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “also,” “area,” and “cafe.” Several word choices or spellings make meaning unclear, such as “meal coat,” “formulation,” “theam,” and “arregement.” Informal or evaluative expressions such as “looks crazy” and “chilling” are not suitable for a factual plan summary. Aim for precise terms that describe layout and change, such as “was replaced by,” “remained in the same position,” and “was added along the southern wall.” Check spelling and use neutral, accurate language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

There are attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, but sentence structures are very limited and frequently inaccurate, which often makes relationships between features unclear. For example, “The cafe were change” has incorrect subject–verb agreement and verb form, while “they also reneuate the tables and chair” does not use a clear tense or correct plural agreement. The response also runs many clauses together without reliable sentence boundaries, as in the opening sequence beginning “The cafe were change the theam.” This makes it difficult to distinguish separate points. Practise writing short, complete sentences in the past tense for the former plan and the present tense for the current layout, checking agreement, articles, plurals, and punctuation before combining ideas.

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