Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Given map illustrate the comparision of a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Overall data collaborates that now college cafe has more facilities than before it was redesigned

Moreover, now there are many outdoor seating area for residents. Salad bar and barbecue also added to the cafe.

Cafe before redesign looks simple but now it looks more attractive. Before in the upper ewstern side

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the general change and mentions several genuine additions, including outdoor seating, a salad bar and a barbecue. However, it does not provide a usable summary of the plans: most changes and retained features are omitted, and the unfinished final sentence (“Before in the upper ewstern side”) leaves a location comparison incomplete. The claim that there are “many outdoor seating area” is vague and does not describe the four tables or the new southern access. The response is also substantially below the required 150 words: it contains 57 words, with 12 copied prompt words excluded. Develop an overview and report the main changes systematically, such as the replacement of staff dining rooms and the addition of new food counters.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening statement is followed by an overview-like comment and then a comparison. Linking words such as “Overall” and “Moreover” help signal these moves. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the ideas are not developed into clear paragraphs, and the final sentence stops mid-thought. The relationship between “more facilities,” the outdoor seating, and the other changes is not explained, while “before” and “now” are repeated without a structured account of locations. Group the information into an introduction, a concise overview, and details comparing the interior and exterior; use clear references to the north, south and other areas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “facilities,” “outdoor seating,” “Salad bar” and “barbecue,” so the reader can identify a few of the changes. However, the range is very limited for this task, and several choices or forms are inaccurate or imprecise: “comparision” is misspelled, “data collaborates” is not a natural way to introduce an overview, and “many outdoor seating area” does not clearly describe the arrangement. “Attractive” is also a subjective judgement rather than a precise description of the plan. Use accurate map vocabulary such as “was replaced by,” “was added,” “along the western wall” and “to the south of the café” to report changes precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts several complete statements and uses a basic contrast between the café “before” and “now,” but sentence structures are mostly simple and there is little variety. Errors in sentence formation and agreement are noticeable, as in “Given map illustrate” and “there are many outdoor seating area.” The phrase “Before in the upper ewstern side” is incomplete, so its intended grammatical relationship is unclear. Articles and plural forms also need closer control when describing the café and its facilities. Practise writing complete comparative sentences, for example, “The staff dining rooms were replaced by a takeaway counter and a coffee bar,” and check subject–verb agreement, articles and plural nouns before finishing.

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