Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plans illustrate a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it currently looks.

Overall, it is clear that there is a massive outdoor seating which is added to the cafe today. Likewise, a salad bar and barbecue section is also added to the redesigned plan. Whereas, staff dining rooms are removed and had been replaced with the takeaway food and the cofee bar. While, bin had been also modified and instead of only one bin there are now recycle bins section added to the new cafe today.

Regarding tables and chairs section, it still takes the largest space of the cafe before and in present also. It is evident that kitchen didn't change except of serving area for all food and drinks had been replaced with the hot meals.

Turning to outdoor section of the cafe, there was no seating arrangement and barbecue section before, but now it contains a large seating arrangement with the group tables and chairs and with a dedicated barbecue section. However, there is no change in the toilets section.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover the main changes and provide a clear overview, especially the addition of outdoor seating and a barbecue, the replacement of staff dining rooms with takeaway and coffee facilities, and the unchanged toilets and central seating area. These points are broadly consistent with the plans, and you also note that the kitchen remains while its counter changes to hot meals. This gives the report a clear focus and addresses the task well. Some details are generalised: for example, “a large seating arrangement” could be made more precise by noting the four outdoor tables, and the new salad bar’s position along the western wall is not stated. More precise location details and a little fuller comparison would strengthen the account.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the interior and outdoor changes. This helps the reader follow the main comparison. However, progression is weakened by several abrupt or awkward links, such as “Whereas” and “While” beginning separate fragments in the overview, and “Turning to outdoor section” shifting focus without a smooth connection to the preceding paragraph. The overview also lists changes in a sequence that feels repetitive rather than grouped by location or type. Use complete sentences and organise the details consistently—for example, first describing the interior, then the new outdoor area. More controlled linking and clearer paragraph development would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “redesigned,” “replaced,” “section,” and “dedicated,” so the main changes are generally understandable. However, the range and control are limited by repeated general terms such as “section,” “added,” and “change,” as well as imprecise or unnatural combinations. “Massive outdoor seating” does not naturally describe the new area, and “recycle bins section” is unclear. There is also a spelling error in “cofee.” Choose more precise plan vocabulary and natural collocations, such as “outdoor dining area,” “recycling bins,” and “counter.” This would help distinguish the facilities and locations more clearly while retaining the relevant vocabulary you already use.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex structures, including contrasts with “Whereas” and “but now,” and most of the intended meaning can be understood. However, a number of sentences are faulty or incomplete, which limits grammatical control. For example, “Whereas, staff dining rooms are removed and had been replaced…” mixes tenses and does not form a complete, well-controlled sentence; “While, bin had been also modified” has a similar problem. Articles and agreement are also inconsistent in “there is a massive outdoor seating” and “bin had been.” Use the past tense for the former plan and the present tense for the current one, and connect contrast clauses to complete main clauses. More accurate sentence construction is the key improvement.

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