Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The map illustrates the changes of a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Overall, it is evident that, staff dining rooms are converted into two take away food and coffee bar. Kitchen and toilets are remain unchanged.

To begin with, on the north - west direction there is kitchen, which is remain unchange in today cafe`. After this, beside a kitchen there is serving area of all food and drink which is converted into hot meals. Moreover, there is bin in east direction in given period, there is new develop recycling bins in the year. Suprinsingly, the toilets and tables and chairs has been found to be same over the gevin period of time.

Furthermore, in order to establish a coffee bar and take away food , the staff dining room has been demolished. After this, in the south side there is space which is build a new outdoor seating and barecue on the south- west corner. entairance was remain unchanged in today cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main conversion of the staff dining rooms into takeaway and coffee facilities, and note that the kitchen and toilets remain in place. You also report the change from a general serving area to hot meals and the addition of outdoor seating and a barbecue. However, the overview is incomplete: it says the tables and chairs are unchanged, but misses the new salad bar and the two new doors to the outdoor area. Some details are unclear or inaccurate, such as saying the entrance remains unchanged without describing its position, and describing the outdoor area only generally rather than noting its tables. A fuller comparison of the key additions and retained features would make the summary more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overall statement, and two detail paragraphs. This gives the reader a basic route through the comparison. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven, and several linking expressions are used mechanically or do not clarify the relationship between ideas. For example, “After this” is repeated even though the plans show a comparison rather than a sequence of events, while “Moreover” and “Surprisingly” do not create clear links. The movement from the northern facilities to the bin, then to the toilets and seating, is also abrupt. Grouping changes by retained features, internal conversions, and new outdoor facilities would create a clearer progression and more effective cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing plans, including “converted,” “demolished,” “recycling bins,” and “outdoor seating.” These choices show an attempt to describe both changes and features that remain. However, the range is limited, and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation problems make parts of the account difficult to interpret, such as “new develop recycling bins,” “barecue,” and “gevin period.” “The staff dining room has been demolished” is also less precise than saying the rooms were replaced by new facilities. Build a more reliable set of plan-description phrases, such as “was replaced by,” “was added,” and “remained in the same position,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with relative clauses, as in “there is kitchen, which is remain unchange in today cafe.” However, the longer structures are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur throughout. Examples include “Kitchen and toilets are remain unchanged,” “the toilets and tables and chairs has been found,” and “there is space which is build a new outdoor seating.” These errors sometimes make the intended comparison hard to follow. Practise forming accurate past passive structures for changes (“was replaced by”) and present-tense structures for current features (“remain in the same position”). Short, controlled sentences would help establish accuracy before adding more complex clauses.

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