Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The proccess chart demonstrates information about the simple procedure by college cafe which is made.

Overall, it is apparent that there are many changes in this cafe such as staff dining rooms replace by take away food and coffee bar and remove serving area.

The first stage is staff dinig rooms replace by take away food and coffe bar. there are many climate changes. We can see that in this cafe add new setting places outsides therefore they can serve many customer on same time.

By this stage, kitchen place improve and add some new facilities. in cafe ricycle bin area spread in large space. in cafe their owner manage their coustmer and give good facilities by barbecue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify some genuine changes, including the replacement of the staff dining rooms with takeaway and coffee facilities, and the addition of outdoor seating and a barbecue. However, the response is very brief and does not give a clear, accurate account of the plans as a whole; the overview also says the serving area was removed without explaining that it became a hot-meals counter. Several details are vague or inaccurate, such as saying the kitchen was improved and the recycling-bin area expanded, which the plans do not establish. The description also includes unsupported claims about serving more customers and the owner providing good facilities. The response is 32 words below the required minimum. Select the main changes and describe their locations and what remained unchanged.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an opening, an overview and two short body paragraphs, and phrases such as “Overall” and “By this stage” attempt to guide the reader. However, the ideas do not progress clearly through the before-and-after plans. “The first stage” suggests a process, although the task is a comparison of two layouts, and the final paragraph combines unrelated points about the kitchen, bins and barbecue. Some references, including “this cafe” and “By this stage,” are unclear. Organise the report by comparing the main areas—for example, changes inside first, then the new outdoor area—and use clear links such as “Previously” and “In the redesigned café.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a few relevant terms from the plans, including “staff dining rooms,” “take away food,” “coffee bar,” “recycle bin” and “barbecue,” so the reader can recognise some of the features being described. However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several spelling errors make the report harder to read: “proccess,” “dinig,” “coffe,” “ricycle” and “coustmer.” Some expressions are also unsuitable or imprecise for describing a floor plan, such as “climate changes,” “setting places” and “area spread in large space.” Use accurate map vocabulary and collocations, such as “was replaced by,” “was added along the western wall” and “remained in the same position,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer constructions, including “therefore they can serve many customer on same time,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns and several are incomplete or difficult to interpret. For example, “staff dinig rooms replace by take away food and coffe bar” lacks a correctly formed verb, while “in cafe their owner manage their coustmer” has problems with articles, agreement and sentence structure. Capitalisation after full stops is also inconsistent, as in “there are many climate changes.” These frequent errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Practise complete comparative sentences using past and present forms, such as “The staff dining rooms were replaced by a takeaway counter and a coffee bar,” and check verb forms, articles and punctuation.

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