Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plans provide informations about the layout of a college cafe before and after the transformation.

Overall, the cafeteria undergone drastic changes. Some areas like kitchen and toilets remained in the original position while ither parts were improved . Salad bar, barbacue and outdoor seating were all built.

The redesign of the college cafe didn't include the kitchen and toilets as it retains their original positions .The hot meals are took the place of the serving area . For the staff dining rooms were converted into two rmms one for the take away food while the seconde was for a coffee bar.Even simple bin were replaced by recycling ones.

A salad bar was constructed inside the cafe on the west side .In the outside part of the cafe a barbecue was erected on the south east and an outdoor seatings with many tables and chairs occupied the rest of the area. To make access to the outdoor area easier some doors were also been added one on the right side of the toilets while the seconde is west, specifically on the opposit side of the kitchen.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You give a clear overview of the main changes, noting that the kitchen and toilets stayed in place while new facilities, including a salad bar and outdoor seating, were added. You also compare the former staff dining rooms with the new takeaway and coffee-bar sections, and mention the change from a general serving area to hot meals and from a bin to recycling bins. These details address the task well. However, the outdoor layout is not fully accurate: the barbecue is immediately south-west of the building, not south-east, and the new doors are on the southern wall rather than beside the toilets and opposite the kitchen. More precise reporting of these positions would strengthen an otherwise well-selected account.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a sensible overall progression: an introduction and overview are followed by changes inside the café and then outside. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking phrases such as “Overall,” “while,” and “In the outside part” guide the reader. However, some connections are awkward or unclear. For example, “For the staff dining rooms were converted…” does not link grammatically to the preceding sentence, and “the seconde is west” makes the location of the second door difficult to follow. The sequence of details is generally coherent, but cohesion is sometimes mechanical and references could be clearer. Use direct transitions such as “Along the north wall…” and describe the southern doors together to make the spatial progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing a plan, including “layout,” “transformation,” “converted,” “recycling,” and “occupied.” These choices help communicate the main changes, and some less common terms are attempted. However, several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors reduce precision: “informations” is not the appropriate form here, “barbacue” is misspelled, and “outdoor seatings” is unnatural. “Erected” is also less suitable for describing a barbecue area than a more neutral verb such as “added” or “provided.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases for map features and check spelling carefully; this would make the description more fluent without requiring a much wider vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “while” and a purpose clause beginning “To make access…”. However, errors in verb forms, sentence construction, and punctuation are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to process. For example, “the cafeteria undergone drastic changes” needs a correctly formed verb, and “The hot meals are took the place…” has an incorrect verb construction. The sentence beginning “For the staff dining rooms…” is also incomplete or incorrectly joined. There are some successful structures, but control is not consistent. Practise forming past-tense descriptions and checking each sentence for a clear subject and finite verb; also avoid placing spaces before full stops.

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