Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Here, thier is two diffrent diagram plan of college cafe area which refleact the cafe before the redesign and how the area is today through the diagram.

by following the plan both the before and after look very desecnt according the time and diagram here we see the kitchen and toilet area were not change at all only in the kitchen the hot meals are repalced by serving area, moreover they inculde salad bar in current desgin. as well as the staff dining rooms are also convert into take away food, and coffe bar area although the bin are also replaced by the big recyling bin as per the new desgin, essentialy table and chairs area are as it is,

and surpringly they include outdoor seating too in the new renovation along with otdoor barbecue.

barbecue and outdoor sitting is new thing which they don't had before even they make two new entrance door on the outdooor side.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the new salad bar, the conversion of the staff dining rooms into takeaway and coffee areas, recycling bins, and outdoor seating with a barbecue. The central tables-and-chairs area and toilets are also correctly described as unchanged. However, the comparison of the kitchen counter is reversed: the original serving area for all food and drink became a hot-meals counter, not the other way around. The response also lacks a clear overview of the main transformation, and some details are vague, such as saying the kitchen and toilets “were not change at all” despite the counter change. A concise overview and more precise reporting of the changes would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response includes a recognisable sequence of comparisons, moving from the kitchen and salad bar to the former staff rooms, bins, and new outdoor facilities. Linking expressions such as “moreover,” “as well as,” and “although” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, most information is packed into one long paragraph, and the progression is difficult to follow because several changes are joined in a single sentence. The opening does not establish a clear overview, while the final sentences repeat the outdoor changes. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, and use clearer sentence boundaries and more precise referencing to improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “staff dining rooms,” “take away food,” “salad bar,” “recycling bin,” and “outdoor seating,” so the reader can identify many of the features. However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make the text harder to read, for example “thier,” “diffrent,” “desecnt,” “repalced,” and “recyling.” Some choices are also imprecise or unnatural: “big recycling bin” is not supported by the plan, and “outdoor sitting” is less suitable than “outdoor seating.” Build accuracy with a small set of map-description terms such as “was converted into,” “remained unchanged,” and “was added,” and check spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine several comparisons in longer sentences, and the basic meaning is often recoverable. However, sentence structures are frequently faulty, particularly where clauses are joined without clear punctuation. For example, “the kitchen and toilet area were not change at all only in the kitchen…” needs a clear clause boundary and a correct verb form; “the staff dining rooms are also convert into…” also has an incorrect passive construction. There are problems with agreement and articles in phrases such as “there is two different diagram plan” and “the bin are also replaced.” Use straightforward, accurate sentences first, then add a few controlled complex structures. Check past-tense passive forms, subject–verb agreement, and punctuation when comparing the former and current layouts.

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