Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps illustrate the information of college cafe before it was redesigned and it looks now a days. Different types of changes are made in new design of college cafe, according to the maps significant improvements are made in new cafe.

Overall, in new designe cafe the area is exented as compared to before designing. The seating capacity is also extented in new cafe, many other improvements are also made such as Bins to recycling bins and many more facilities.

In old version, there was a serving area of all the food and drink availabe in the kichen which was conjusted the area of kitchen as compared to the new version only hot meals were served in the kichen. There were small staff dinning rooms in previous cafe while in new version these are replaced by the take away food and coffe bar.

Futhermore, Tables and chairs were only in hall of the old version cafe but in new cafe these are extented to outdoor seating, and also barbecue point is made outside the hall. Toilets are same as in previous cafe, while the bins are converted into recycling bines, this is a good initiative.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation: the former staff dining rooms become takeaway and coffee facilities, the serving counter is now for hot meals, and outdoor seating with a barbecue has been added. You also note that the toilets remain and the bin becomes recycling bins. These are relevant comparisons, and your overview recognises expansion and increased seating. However, some details are unclear or not fully supported: the café’s indoor area is not shown as extended, and the seating is not necessarily increased inside; rather, seating is added outside. The description also omits the new salad bar and does not explain the layout changes in much detail. A more precise overview and fuller coverage of the key additions would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs comparing the former and current layouts. This gives the reader a generally clear route through the information, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “while,” and “Furthermore” help signal comparisons. The progression is not always smooth, however. The overview repeats the idea of improvements without specifying the most important changes, and some sentences combine several features, making relationships less clear. For example, the final paragraph moves from indoor seating to the barbecue, toilets, and bins in quick succession. Grouping changes by location or by what was retained versus added would make the organisation more deliberate and cohesion less dependent on basic connectors.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “serving area,” “staff dining rooms,” “outdoor seating,” and “recycling bins,” so the main ideas can be understood. However, the range and precision are limited, and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce fluency: “designe,” “exented,” “conjusted,” “dinning,” and “bines.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “the information of college cafe” and “barbecue point.” Choose standard map-description terms and check spelling carefully; for instance, describe the barbecue as an “area” and say that facilities “were added” or “replaced.” More accurate collocations and less repetition of “new version” would help convey the changes more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and clauses introduced by “which.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur. The opening phrase “before it was redesigned and it looks now a days” shifts awkwardly between past and present, while “the area of kitchen” and “these are replaced” show problems with articles and tense. In “the seating capacity is also extented,” the sentence structure is understandable, but the description would be clearer with a correctly formed passive construction. Aim to use past tense for the former plan and present tense for the current one, and check articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries. Greater control of these patterns would make the comparisons easier to follow.

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