Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is a camprison bettween cafe after it was redsigned .There might be lot of things are upgraded ,changed and some of the things are newly added .The hole summery is below .

Let's talk about the addition of new things in this .There are three things which are added in this cafe after it is redsigned such as the chairs thoses are added out side the cafe .Out door seating area is added in it .With that there are two more things such as salad bar and barbeue .

Now we will take about the things those are replaced or chaged .There are also there things those are replaced .Those are, the serving area was changed in hot meals and also the staff dining room was converted into take away food and coffee bar .

Now at last the recyclings bins are upgraded as they look bigger then as they are

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several genuine changes, including the new outdoor seating and barbecue, the salad bar, the conversion of the serving area to hot meals, and the former staff dining rooms becoming a takeaway area and coffee bar. This gives the response relevant coverage of the plans. However, the overview is vague (“lot of things are upgraded”) and the report does not clearly summarise the main overall pattern: the central seating and toilets remain, while facilities and access are expanded or reorganised. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the chairs were not newly added inside the café, and the recycling bins are not shown as larger. The comparison of the two plans is therefore partial, with important features such as the unchanged kitchen and toilets omitted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from additions to replacements, and phrases such as “Now we will take about” signal a change of topic. This helps the reader recognise the broad categories being discussed. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the opening promises a summary, but the body does not provide a concise overview before listing details, and the final point about recycling bins is left unfinished. Repeated framing such as “There are three things” and “Now at last” feels mechanical, while “There are also there things” makes the intended connection difficult to follow. Organise the report into a clear overview and logically grouped comparisons, using precise references to the before and current plans.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “serving area,” “hot meals,” “staff dining room,” “salad bar,” and “outdoor seating area,” so the reader can identify several features. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For example, “camprison” appears to mean comparison, “redsigned” is misspelled, and “barbeue” is not the correct spelling of barbecue. Phrases such as “things are upgraded” and “take about the things” are also imprecise or unnatural for describing a plan. Use specific verbs such as “added,” “converted,” and “remained,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few longer structures, for example, “There are three things which are added in this cafe after it is redsigned,” and uses simple sentences to separate points. However, sentence patterns are limited, and errors in tense, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make some statements difficult to interpret. In “There might be lot of things are upgraded,” the modal phrase and following clause are not joined grammatically; “the staff dining room was converted” also does not match the plural rooms shown. The final sentence, “the recyclings bins are upgraded as they look bigger then as they are,” is especially unclear. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions of changes and use complete, controlled sentences with clear subject–verb agreement.

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