Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plans are provides a clear comparison between the cafe of the college before redsiging and afetr the developmental work happened. It is clear shown in the plan the the cafe went through a huge development where some of its areas remain same but noticeably some new sections are available in present day that was missng in the past cafe plan.

To begin with, old cafe had kitchen at its top north west side and in the same room there was the serving section with all kind of beverages and meals which is still same in present plan with the slight change of serving area with hot meal section. Moreover, the long corridor of section with the sitting arrangement still same in the both plans where recycle bins are introduced on the east side and on the staff sitting area two new sections are introduced for coffee and take away.

Secondly some new developments are here like outdoor sitting along the barbecue section. Also there are new enterance and exits and a salad bar at the west side of the belding. Toilets are at the same place before redesigning.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main change as a substantial redesign and cover several important features: the kitchen remains, its counter now serves hot meals, the former staff rooms become takeaway and coffee sections, and outdoor seating with a barbecue is added. You also correctly note the salad bar, recycling bins and unchanged toilets. This gives the report a relevant overview and addresses the main comparison. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the serving counter is described as being in the same room as the kitchen, and “new entrances and exits” is not supported by the plans; the new doors lead to outdoor seating. The central seating area’s continuity could also be stated more precisely. More exact descriptions of these changes would strengthen an otherwise solid account.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening overview followed by two paragraphs describing the changes, with sequencing phrases such as “To begin with” and “Secondly.” The reader can generally follow the comparison, and related features are grouped together. However, the progression is sometimes mechanical, and several long sentences combine multiple changes without clear boundaries. For example, the sentence beginning “Moreover, the long corridor…” moves from seating to recycling bins and then to the former staff rooms, making the relationships between details harder to track. Some references, such as “which is still same” and “there,” are also not fully clear. Organising the report into clearer before/after comparisons and using more precise linking and reference would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “redesign,” “serving section,” “outdoor seating,” “barbecue,” and “salad bar.” These terms help communicate the main changes, and there is some attempt to vary wording. However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural choices are noticeable, including “redsiging,” “afetr,” “missng,” “belding,” and “sitting arrangement.” Phrases such as “huge development” and “new developments are here” are broad and less suitable for a precise plan description. “Long corridor of section” is also difficult to interpret. Aim for accurate, conventional terms such as “central seating area,” “facilities,” and “was converted into,” and check spelling carefully to make your meaning consistently clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “where” and “which,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence structure and basic grammar occur across the response. For example, “The plans are provides” has incorrect verb agreement and form, while “It is clear shown in the plan the the cafe went through” contains a faulty construction and missing “that.” Other examples include “old cafe had kitchen” and “Toilets are at the same place before redesigning,” where articles and tense relationships are not controlled. Some sentences also run together, particularly the one beginning “Moreover.” Practise accurate past-versus-present comparisons, articles, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries while retaining your attempts at complex structures.

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