Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The couple of diagrams illustrate design of college cafe before and after changing.

Overall, the couple of staff dining rooms were converted into take away food shop and into coffee bar. The large numbers of outdoor seating was added into new design which attach by Barbecue area.

Initially, the serving area was modified into hot meals area. The both staff dining rooms were redesigned into take away food shop and into coffee bar. However, the door of both rooms are not changed. The bin are modified into recycling bins.

The area of tables and chairs look today smaller than before due to addition of salad bar. On the outdoor side, the new seating are design which consist of five bench and numbers of chairs. The barbecue area was added on the left side of outdoor seating. The toilets are present on the same position. The two new doors are looking toward the side of outdoor seating.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation clearly: the former staff dining rooms become takeaway and coffee areas, and new outdoor seating and a barbecue are added. You also report several accurate details, including the hot-meals counter, recycling bins, salad bar and unchanged toilets. This covers the task well, with a useful overall summary. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the outdoor area has four rectangular tables, not “five bench,” and the doors are described as opening towards the outdoor seating rather than simply being new southern access doors. The claim that the central seating area is smaller is not explicitly established by the plan. More precise reporting of the outdoor layout and a clearer comparison of what remains unchanged would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs of details. This gives the reader a coherent route through the changes, and linking words such as “Overall,” “Initially” and “However” help signal relationships. Some progression is less clear within the detail paragraphs, though: the account moves from the serving area to staff rooms and bins, then to the seating area and outdoor features without consistently grouping changes by location or by what stayed the same. Repeated phrasing such as “into … and into” also makes connections feel mechanical. Organise the description more deliberately—for example, cover the interior changes together, then the new southern outdoor area—and use clearer references to the original and current plans.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “redesigned,” “recycling bins,” “salad bar” and “outdoor seating,” so the main changes are generally understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “large numbers of outdoor seating” is not idiomatic, “five bench” mislabels the furniture, and “the new seating are design” does not express the intended feature clearly. “Take away food shop” is also less precise than the plan’s label, “takeaway food.” These errors limit precision and sometimes make the reader pause, despite the relevant range of topic vocabulary. Aim for accurate plan labels and natural collocations, and check whether a noun is countable before using it with a number.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex forms, including a comparison with “due to” and a relative clause beginning “which consist of.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors occur across sentence patterns and often make the wording awkward. Examples include “The couple of diagrams illustrate design,” “The both staff dining rooms,” and “The door of both rooms are not changed,” where articles, word order and subject–verb agreement need attention. There are also tense and passive-form problems in “the new seating are design” and “The two new doors are looking.” Use the present simple for features shown in the current plan and past forms for completed changes, and check agreement and articles in each sentence. More accurate control of these patterns would improve clarity.

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