Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps illustrate a college cafeteria before and after redesign. Overall the cafe changed alot but its take away facility and outdoor seating are the most notable things. The entrance and toilet location remained the same as earlier. Firstly the bin is replaced with recycling bins which is environment friendly. Secondly as a person enters he has a quick grab and go coffee bar right there which save the time of public. Right next to it is the take away food which also relax a customer to get its food and go to his work. The Table and chairs area remained there and it didn't changed, also a Salaad bar is introduced there. In the kitchen there isn't much change however the serving area is replaced with hot meals portion. In the old cafe setup, the sitting space was a conjusted, but now its much better and appealing to clients as they have a outdoor seating with a perfect barbecue spot over there. Barbecue add 4 star to the outer space. In general the cafe has been totally renewed

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation and provide a clear overall summary, noting the new takeaway and outdoor facilities and the unchanged toilet location. Several details are accurately reported: the bin becomes recycling bins, the serving counter is now for hot meals, and the central tables and chairs remain. This covers the task well, with some relevant comparisons. However, the account is not fully precise: the entrance is not described as remaining in the same position, and the coffee bar is not simply “right there” as a quick-grab facility. The claim that the old seating was “congested” is an interpretation rather than a feature shown by the plans. To strengthen the response, describe the new salad bar’s position and the two new southern doors, and keep the overview focused on observable changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an opening overview is followed by a sequence of changes and a concluding statement. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “however” and “In general” help signal progression. However, the body reads largely as one continuous paragraph, and the repeated sequencing of individual features makes the comparison feel somewhat mechanical. Some references are also unclear: “right next to it” and “there” do not precisely identify the locations being discussed, while “the Table and chairs area” shifts abruptly into the salad bar. Grouping the information into paragraphs—for example, changes inside the café and additions outside—and using clearer spatial references would make the progression easier to follow and cohesion more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of task-related vocabulary, including “redesign,” “recycling bins,” “serving area,” “outdoor seating” and “barbecue,” so the main changes are generally understandable. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “grab and go” and “appealing to clients.” However, several choices are informal, imprecise or awkward for an objective map report: “relax a customer to get its food,” “4 star,” and “totally renewed” do not describe the plans naturally. Spelling errors such as “alot,” “Salaad” and “conjusted” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise spatial and functional terms, and avoid evaluating the design or its benefits unless the plans provide evidence for those claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrast with “however” and a relative clause in “which also relax a customer.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “which save the time” needs subject–verb agreement, “it didn't changed” uses the wrong verb form after “didn’t,” and “the sitting space was a conjusted” has an incorrect article and sentence structure. There are also problems with articles and number in “a outdoor seating” and “Barbecue add.” These errors show that control is not yet consistent, particularly in longer sentences. Check agreement, verb forms after auxiliaries, and article use, and divide complex ideas into shorter, accurate sentences.

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