Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The maps illustrate the chnges took place in a cafe between before and after.

Overall,the underwent significat development over ther period ,with several new residental

and commercial facilities being added.In contrast some natural features remained unchanged.after development some area is changed and something is converted after development.makes the new shops bins and serving area is converted after renovate.

The cafe changed with new areas and developed the layout.The new shop makes for people salad bar,before renovate the cafe here staff dining rooms,after development makes the new 2 shops take away food and coffe bar.And also here bin east side.after this converted into recycling bins.kitchen is properly same before and after.

On the other hand the tables chairs and toilets is also same before and after.Now makes the new barbecue,inital serving area (all food & drink) her after development this area converted into hot meals. And include the new outdoor seating for people near barbecue

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the new salad bar, the replacement of the staff dining rooms with takeaway and coffee areas, recycling bins, hot meals, and outdoor seating with a barbecue. You also note that the kitchen, toilets, and central tables and chairs remain. These details show a relevant understanding of both plans. However, the overview is unclear and repeats general claims about development rather than summarising the main pattern of change. Some descriptions are also imprecise: the plans show the former serving counter becoming a hot-meals counter, while the new outdoor seating is outside along the southern wall. A clearer overview and more precise descriptions of where features are located would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts to group changes, first discussing new facilities and then features that remain or have changed. This gives it some basic organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because ideas are repeated and connections between them are often unclear. For example, the overview repeats that areas changed and shops and bins were added, before these points are described again in the body. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” do not clearly express the relationship between the information that follows. Organise the report into a concise overview and paragraphs that compare related areas, using clear references such as “In the northern section” and “Meanwhile, the central seating area remained unchanged.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “recycling bins,” “staff dining rooms,” “salad bar,” and “outdoor seating.” These terms help identify the main facilities. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or spellings make the meaning less clear, such as “residental and commercial facilities,” “new shops,” and “makes the new shops.” The repeated use of “changed,” “new,” and “development” also makes the description imprecise. Use more specific map vocabulary and accurate collocations, for example, say that facilities were “added,” “replaced,” or “retained,” and describe their positions with terms such as “along the western wall” or “in the south-west corner.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the reader can generally identify the features you are comparing. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, which sometimes makes relationships between ideas hard to understand. For example, “after development makes the new shops bins” lacks a clear subject and verb structure, while “the tables chairs and toilets is also same” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “a cafe” and “the new 2 shops.” Focus first on producing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and articles. A reliable pattern is: “The staff dining rooms were replaced by a takeaway area and a coffee bar.”

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.