Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plans illustrate how a college cafe used to look before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Overall, the new deseign offer more features than before, which include outdoor seating area, and barbecue facility. The major changes inside the cafe is the food take away service, a coffee bar and a salad bar. However, the old deseign provided staff dining rooms, which are now replaced with coffee bar and food take away booth.

The cafe before it was redeseigned, used to serve all types of food and drinks from one place, which was in the kitchen area but the new deseign now serves only hot meals from that place and there are two new rooms for coffee bar and food take away service, both of which once used for staff dining. A salard bar is added on the left side of the cafe and the general trash bin is replaced with some recycling bins.However, another significant change is the outdoor seating arrangement and barbecue facility, which were not availabled in the previous setup.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main transformation clearly: the former staff dining rooms become takeaway and coffee facilities, the single serving point changes to hot meals, and new salad-bar and outdoor facilities are introduced. Your overview also captures the broad contrast between the old and redesigned café. Most details are consistent with the plans, including the recycling bins replacing the bin and the barbecue and outdoor seating being new. To make the report more fully developed, describe the layout changes more precisely: for example, the salad bar is along the western wall, and two new doors connect the café to the outdoor seating on the south side. The claim that the old serving point was “in the kitchen area” is imprecise; it was adjacent to the kitchen.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about the interior and then the outdoor additions. This helps the reader understand the main comparison. However, progression within the body is not always smooth: the second paragraph combines several changes in long sentences, and the final “However” does not express a clear contrast with the preceding information. Some linking is repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “which,” while “Overall” and “However” are not always used to show the relationship between ideas precisely. Separate the interior changes from the outdoor changes, and group related features in a clear order. This would make the organisation easier to follow and reduce the sense of a list.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing the redesign, including “replaced,” “outdoor seating,” “recycling bins,” and “significant change.” These terms communicate the main features, but the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate or repetitive. “Deseign” and “redeseigned” are misspellings, while “salard bar” is also misspelled. “Food take away service” and “food take away booth” are awkward expressions; “takeaway counter” or “takeaway area” would be more natural. “General trash bin” is less suitable than “waste bin,” and “facility” is repeated. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and vary the language used to describe additions and replacements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of sentence forms, including relative clauses and comparisons, as in “both of which once used for staff dining.” However, that clause is missing a verb (“were”), and errors in agreement and sentence construction recur. For example, “The major changes … is” should use “are,” while “the new design offer” needs “offers.” The phrase “which were not availabled” has an incorrect verb form; use “were not available.” There are also punctuation problems, such as the missing space after “bins.” and the comma separating the opening subject from its verb in “The cafe before it was redesigned, used to serve…”. These errors sometimes make sentences less controlled. Check agreement, complete clauses, and punctuation when proofreading.

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