Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates show a college cafe before it was redesigned and it looks present today

Overall ,it is clear cafe before redesign serving area and present cafe is Hot meals this place and see staff dining rooms ,and as compare new present cafe adding some new place old cafe cafe before redesign have diferent area of cafe different place are no proper decide

Looking the both chart of cafe design before redesign serving area decide but present same place is hot meal which is good for customer and see stadd dining rooms both are combine and this place make take away food and coffee bar section and left side cafe see salad area which easily customer carry these things and attach outside Barbecue which easily customer carry and get things and cooked without smoke and Outdoor sealing is best protect from fire and incident happen inside the cafes area

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify that the café has changed and mention several relevant features, including the hot-meals counter, the former staff dining rooms becoming takeaway and coffee-bar sections, and the new outdoor seating and barbecue. However, the response gives only a minimal account of the plans and does not clearly summarise the main changes or provide a reliable overview. Some details are inaccurate or unsupported: the outdoor seating is not described as protecting against fire, and the barbecue is not presented as a way for customers to carry food. The comparison that the old café had “no proper decide” is unclear. The response is also 141 words, nine words below the 150-word minimum. Describe the key changes factually and add a clear overview of what was retained and what was added.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview-like paragraph and then a longer comparison. You also use a few linking expressions, such as “Overall” and “Looking the both chart.” However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression, and the long final sentence combines several unrelated points about the counters, salad bar, barbecue and safety. References such as “this place” and “these things” make it difficult to identify what you mean. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the main changes, and group features by location or by what changed. Clear sentence boundaries and more precise referencing would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “serving area,” “staff dining rooms,” “take away food,” “coffee bar” and “outdoor seating,” so the reader can recognise several features of the plans. However, the range is basic and repeated, and inaccurate word choices often strain understanding. Phrases such as “no proper decide,” “different place,” and “carry these things” do not express the intended comparisons clearly. There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “diferent,” “stadd,” and “sealing.” Aim for precise map vocabulary and natural collocations, such as “was replaced by,” “was converted into,” and “an outdoor dining area.” Check spelling and avoid repeating “place” when a specific feature name is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer structures, including “which easily customer carry,” but most sentences are difficult to interpret because of frequent errors in sentence formation and basic grammar. For example, “The chart illustrates show” combines two verb forms, while “Overall, it is clear cafe before redesign serving area” lacks the articles and sentence structure needed to express a complete idea. Subject–verb agreement and plurals are also problematic in “customer carry” and “both are combine.” Punctuation is inconsistent, with a long final sentence containing several ideas without clear boundaries. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, using a clear subject and verb, then connect related ideas with accurate clauses.

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