Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

first serving arena is edited and it customize in hot meal and staff dining room is edited by take way or coffee bar salad bar is newly added in cafe bin is converted into recycle bin barbecue is added in cafe and also in menu 4 outdoor seating table is added which is consist of 25 chairs

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify several genuine changes, including the serving counter becoming a hot-meal area, the former staff dining rooms being replaced by takeaway and coffee facilities, and the addition of a salad bar and outdoor seating. However, the response is far too brief to summarise the plans adequately and does not provide a clear overview of the main changes. Some details are inaccurate: the outdoor area has four tables, but the plan does not show 25 chairs; the barbecue is outside, not inside the café. You also omit important features such as the unchanged kitchen, central seating and toilets, and the recycling bins replacing the bin. Develop a fuller comparison and include only details supported by the plans.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response presents a basic sequence of changes, moving from the serving area and staff rooms to the new facilities, bins and outdoor seating. This gives the reader some sense of the topic, but the ideas are compressed into one long sentence and are not grouped or clearly ordered. The repeated use of “and” does little to show how the changes relate to one another, while there is no separate overview or clear distinction between indoor and outdoor changes. Organise the response into short paragraphs—for example, an overview followed by indoor changes and then outdoor additions—and use linking phrases such as “Meanwhile” or “In addition” to make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “staff dining room,” “coffee bar,” “salad bar,” “recycle bin” and “outdoor seating.” These terms show awareness of the facilities being compared. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward, such as “serving arena,” “customize in hot meal,” and “converted into recycle bin.” These expressions make parts of the description less clear. Use precise plan vocabulary and standard collocations, such as “serving area,” “was replaced by a hot-meal counter,” and “the bin was replaced with recycling bins.” Check spelling and word forms, and vary verbs such as “added,” “replaced” and “remained.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates a few basic comparisons, but it relies on a single extended sentence joined mainly by “and,” so there is little evidence of a range of sentence structures. Several grammatical patterns are inaccurate: “it customize in hot meal” lacks a suitable passive verb form, and “which is consist of 25 chairs” has an incorrect verb construction and agreement. Articles and plurals also need attention in phrases such as “in cafe” and “4 outdoor seating table.” Use complete, shorter sentences with clear subjects and verbs, for example, “The serving area was replaced by a counter for hot meals.” Practise past-tense passive forms for changes and present-tense forms for features that remain.

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