Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The planning illustrate a college canteen before it was restructure and how it looks now.Overview, the cafe before summarize the staff room and convert into specialized things and divided into two different partician. Other one, the serving quater area has been construction coming soon.

In other details, the college cafe canteen before redesigned plans in the nortahn west area has been construct the kitchen and in the half of middle there is a place of here a serving quater area and available here a lot of cold drinks and different kinds of food. Further, in the central part of south set the tables and chairs for sit their teachers and students.Others, the eastarn beside before cafe a bin installed.and the eastarn corner has toilets.

In other hands, today college cafe has constructed and the before serving quater covert in to hot meals. In the central part of place staff dining rooms change their two different ways. Further, southarn beside the bin covert the different types of recycling bins.As well as, the southarn middle side install salad bar. Finally, the southarn corner does the place is empty and college purcahse it place and add add barbeque and the outdoor seating.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad change from staff dining rooms to new food-service facilities and mention several relevant features, including the kitchen, hot meals, recycling bins, toilets, and outdoor seating. However, some key details are missing or inaccurately described. The former staff dining rooms became a takeaway-food section and a coffee bar, not simply “two different ways”; the salad bar is on the western wall, not the southern side; and the outdoor seating and barbecue are additions rather than a previously empty area that was purchased. The overview also says the serving area is “coming soon,” which does not clearly describe the completed redesign. A clearer summary of the main changes, supported by accurate locations and comparisons, would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two plans, so there is some basic organisation. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow, and several details are grouped without a clear spatial or comparative order. For example, the overview moves from staff rooms to “specialized things” and then to a serving area “coming soon,” leaving the main changes unclear. Linking phrases such as “Further,” “In other hands,” and “As well as” are repetitive or used inaccurately, and references such as “the central part of place” are hard to interpret. Organise the description by comparing corresponding areas, and use a small range of accurate transitions to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to describing a plan, including “central part,” “recycling bins,” “outdoor seating,” and “barbecue.” However, the range is limited and many word choices or spellings make the description difficult to understand. Examples include “serving quater area,” “partician,” “nortahn west,” and “purcahse.” Some expressions are also unsuitable or unclear, such as “specialized things” and “available here a lot of cold drinks.” Use precise labels from the plans and standard location language, such as “north-west corner,” “counter,” and “along the southern wall.” Checking spelling and choosing natural collocations would make your meaning more reliable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences and use time contrasts, but control of sentence structure and verb forms is weak, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “The planning illustrate” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “before it was restructure” uses an incorrect verb form. In “the before serving quater covert in to hot meals,” the sentence lacks a clear subject and correctly formed passive construction. Articles, prepositions, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “in the half of middle” and the run-on opening “now.Overview.” Build accuracy first with clear simple sentences, then practise passive forms such as “was converted into” and “were added,” checking agreement and sentence boundaries.

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