Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The kitchen of the cafe remains exactly the same, However the serving area of the cafe has changed. Now it has been segregated from serving all food and drinks from same place to serving only hot meals. Staff dining rooms from the old layout has been converted to takeaway and coffee bar. The cafe before redesign missed the salad bar, now a new salad bar has been added on the right side. Tables and chairs area remains unchanged before and after redesigning. Bins have been converted to recycling bins in the new plan of the cafe. Toilets position remains unchanged in redesigning. However in new additions in the new design are of new barbecue and of oudoor seating, which old design lacked. the outdoor seating contains 26 seats and 5 tables.

The new design of the cafe seems more segregated and has has dedicated areas for serving hot meals, take away and coffee bar. Also redesign can accomodate more customers and can elevate the customer experience compared tro the old design.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main changes and several features that stayed the same: the kitchen and toilets remain in place, the former staff dining rooms become takeaway and coffee-bar areas, and outdoor seating and a barbecue are added. This covers the task well, and your concluding comparison gives a clear overall impression of a more specialised layout. Some details, however, are inaccurate or insufficiently precise. The salad bar is on the western wall, not the right side, and the outdoor area is shown with four tables; the stated 26 seats and five tables are not supported by the plan. The overview would be stronger if it highlighted the new outdoor extension and the reorganisation of service areas without adding unsupported counts. These points keep the report from being fully precise and developed throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response follows a generally sensible order, moving from changes inside the café to the new outdoor facilities and then offering a concluding comparison. Linking words such as “However” and “Also” help signal relationships between ideas. However, the first paragraph reads largely as a sequence of separate observations, and the contrastive “However” is not always needed or clearly connected to the preceding point. The final paragraph repeats the idea that the new design is more organised without adding much detail. Grouping unchanged features together, then describing internal changes and the outdoor additions in separate sections, would create clearer progression. Check that each reference is explicit—for example, specify which area “it” refers to—so cohesion feels less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “segregated,” “converted,” “dedicated areas,” and “customer experience,” and the reader can understand the main comparisons. Some choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing a plan: “missed the salad bar” suggests an oversight rather than its absence, while “serving all food and drinks from same place” is wordy. “Right side” is also less precise than naming the western wall. There are spelling errors in “oudoor” and “tro,” and “accomodate” is misspelled. Aim for concise, accurate map language such as “was replaced by,” “was added along the western wall,” and “the layout now includes.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including contrasts with “However” and the concluding sentence beginning “The new design…”. Meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors remain. In “Staff dining rooms from the old layout has been converted,” the plural subject requires “have,” and “the same place” needs an article. The sentence “Now it has been segregated from serving…” has an unclear structure, while “However in new additions…” is not a complete, well-formed clause. There is also an unnecessary capital after “However” mid-sentence and inconsistent sentence punctuation. Use complete, direct comparisons—for example, “The former staff dining rooms have been replaced by a takeaway area and a coffee bar”—and check agreement and articles.

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