Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

As we can see there is cafe design which has reorganised and has many changes which we can clearly see and also there is things which are same as before.

First and foremost the significant change which was before staff dining rooms and now take away and coffee bar has taken place on both rooms. where as the bin which was just to throw trash has been changed into recycling bins. The serving area has demenish and hot meals had took place of that

On other hand there also many things which had developed subsequent and wasn't before anything like as salad bar which is inside the bar so people can have salad which was not avaliable before and there is also barbecue maden outdoor and also outdoor seating arranged so individuals can have barbecue there.

There also some things which is seen samed and not developed as others. The whole cafe has changed face expect toilets and kitchen which are similar as before and also tables and chairs are not moved or changed anywhere.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation from staff dining rooms to takeaway and coffee facilities, and you note the new salad bar, outdoor seating and barbecue. You also correctly report that the kitchen, toilets and central tables and chairs remain, and that the bin becomes recycling bins. These details address the task, but some features are not fully or precisely described: for example, the serving counter is now labelled for hot meals, rather than simply saying the serving area “has demenish.” The overview is also broad (“many changes”) rather than clearly summarising the main pattern: the interior was reorganised and expanded with new outdoor facilities. Develop the comparisons more precisely, including the new southern doors and the location of the salad bar, to make the account more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an opening statement, paragraphs describing changes, and a final comparison of features that stayed the same. This gives the reader a coherent route through the plans. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes loose, and linking phrases such as “First and foremost” and “On other hand” feel mechanical or are not used accurately. The sentence beginning “There also some things” introduces unchanged features, but the connection to the previous paragraph could be clearer. Some references are also vague, such as “that” in the description of the serving area. Grouping the changes by location or by what was added, removed and retained, and using clearer transitions, would make the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing changes, including “recycling bins,” “outdoor seating,” “barbecue,” and “similar as before.” This gives the reader a basic understanding of the redesign. However, the range and control of vocabulary are limited, with several noticeable spelling, word-form and collocation problems: “demenish,” “avaliable,” “maden,” and “changed face” are not appropriate forms for this description. Phrases such as “things which are same” and “has taken place on both rooms” are also imprecise. Aim for standard plan-description language such as “was replaced by,” “was added,” “remained unchanged,” and “located along the western wall.” More accurate collocations would make your meaning clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the reader can generally understand the main comparisons. However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent. For example, “there is cafe design which has reorganised” lacks a clear subject and uses an unsuitable verb form, while “the whole cafe has changed face expect toilets and kitchen” has problems with sentence construction and articles. Agreement and tense are also uncertain in “there also some things which is seen samed.” Several sentences run together or begin with fragments, as in “where as the bin…” after a full stop. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past or present forms when comparing the two plans. This will make your ideas more reliable to read.

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