Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two plans compares the look of a college cafe before and after renovation.

Overall, whole cafe transforms to new look. Cafe before redesigning was simple having kitchen area, staff dining rooms, a main hall with table and chairs , toilets and bin. After redesigning, cafe looks more spacious, almost all the rooms are on their same places although outdoor seating area, salad bar and barbecue are new additions in the cafe.

Kitchen area remains almost same with subtle changes of serving area with Hot meals.Staff dining rooms are transformed into Take away food and coffee bar with slighlty decrease in the room sizes.Moreover, area for bin is increased to thrice whereas main hall remains unchanged with same placement of table and chairs.

On the left side of main hall, Salad bar has been added.Outer seating is another big addition to cafe probably in the backyard of cafe as barbeque area is also new part of outdoor seating. Toilets area remain the same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main before-and-after changes and provide a clear overview: the kitchen and toilets remain, while the salad bar and outdoor seating are new. You also accurately identify the conversion of the staff dining rooms into takeaway and coffee areas. This meets the task well, with some features reported in useful detail. However, a few points are unclear or unsupported: the plans do not show that the café becomes “more spacious,” and the bin area is not shown as increasing “to thrice”; recycling bins simply replace the single bin. The outdoor barbecue is also adjacent to, rather than part of, the outdoor seating. More precise descriptions of these changes would make the account more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing internal and external changes. The sequence from the kitchen and former staff rooms to the hall and outdoor area is generally easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “On the left side” help guide the reader, although some connections feel mechanical or do not clarify the relationship between details. For example, the sentence about the barbecue and outdoor seating combines two separate features in a confusing way. Paragraphing could also distinguish the overview from the detailed comparisons more clearly. Use location-based sequencing consistently and connect each change directly to its corresponding feature in the earlier plan.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing a plan, including “transformed,” “remains,” “subtle changes,” and “new additions.” These choices help communicate the main changes, and the meaning is generally clear. However, some word choices and collocations are imprecise: “the look of a college cafe” is less natural than “the layout of a college café,” while “outer seating” and “backyard” are not the most suitable terms for the labelled outdoor area. There are also spelling errors, including “slighlty” and “barbeque,” and inconsistent capitalisation of “Hot meals.” Aim for precise plan-description vocabulary and check spelling; for example, use “outdoor seating” and “adjacent to” when describing the barbecue’s position.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, and several comparisons are understandable, such as “Staff dining rooms are transformed into Take away food and coffee bar.” However, some grammatical errors remain. The opening has subject–verb disagreement (“plans compares”), and “cafe transforms to new look” is missing an article and uses an awkward verb pattern. Other examples include “Toilets area remain” and “Kitchen area remains almost same,” where articles or agreement are needed. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: “Hot meals.Staff” runs two sentences together, and spacing around commas is inconsistent. These errors do not usually prevent understanding, but more accurate articles, agreement, and sentence punctuation would improve control.

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