Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagrams illustrate the past layout of a college cafe which is refurbished and gets redesigned.

Evidently, there are lots of changes has been takes place after renovation. Noticably, the portion of salad bar and barbecue is added in the new blueprint. Similarly, outdoor seatings are arranged after the re-establishment. The area of kitchen, toilets and indoors tables and chairs remained stable in situ.

To be specific, salad bar and barbecue are included towards to the left side of new blueprint. Additionally, carpet area of Kitchen are unchanged but Hot meals takes way of the serving area. Furthermore, staff dining rooms are changed into take away food and coffee bar. The normal bins are replaced by the recycling bins. Significantly, outdoor sitting area are added in front of the cafe. Along with this, two doors will inculde after the renovation, one is near the barbecue and another is nearn to the toilets. Lastly, the indoors tables and chairs and toilets are the same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the new salad bar, outdoor seating, barbecue, and the conversion of the staff dining rooms into takeaway and coffee areas. You also note that the kitchen, toilets, and central seating remain in place, giving the reader a useful overall comparison. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the barbecue is outside to the south-west, while the salad bar is inside along the western wall, rather than both simply being “towards to the left side.” The new southern doors lead to outdoor seating; the claim that one is near the toilets is not supported by the plan. More precise descriptions of these locations and the recycling bins would make the main features clearer and more fully reported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview of the main changes, and a paragraph giving further details. Sequencing words such as “Additionally,” “Furthermore,” and “Lastly” help signal the progression. The overall organisation is coherent, but some linking is mechanical, and the repeated point that the indoor tables and toilets are unchanged (“remained stable in situ” and “are the same”) uses space without adding information. References such as “this” in “Along with this” are also vague, and the details move between locations without a consistent route through the plan. Grouping the changes by interior, unchanged features, and outdoor additions would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “layout,” “blueprint,” “renovation,” and “recycling bins,” and the reader can generally understand the changes you intend to describe. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this task: “carpet area” does not describe the kitchen’s position, “outdoor seatings” is not the usual form, and “re-establishment” is an unsuitable substitute for redesign. There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “Noticably,” “inculde,” and “nearn.” These errors make the description less precise, particularly when reporting locations. Prefer straightforward, accurate terms such as “area,” “outdoor seating,” and “redesign,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, using clauses with “which,” “but,” and “after.” However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and prepositions are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “there are lots of changes has been takes place” combines incompatible verb forms; “the area of kitchen … remained stable” needs an article and clearer agreement; and “towards to the left side” uses an incorrect preposition pattern. The future form “two doors will inculde after the renovation” is also unsuitable for describing a completed redesign. Use consistent past or present-perfect forms for the changes, and check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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