Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two plans provide information about a college cafe before it was reshaped and how it appears now

Overall, it can clearly seen that the major change is the addition of multiple outdoor seating. In addition, new facilities have been offered to the students.

In the past, Kitchen was located in the north, providing serving area for all food and drinks. Furthermore, two rooms for staff were existed at the middle of the cafe. In addition, Toilets were located at the south east of the cafe and a bin was found above them. Finally, the remaining of cafe was for tables and chairs.

Currently, multiple of outdoor seating are added in the south of cafe. Besides it, barbecue is established in the east south. Moreover, take away food and coffee bar are constructed in the middle of the cafe, replacing staff dining rooms. In addition, a bin is replaced by a recycling bins. serving area is also replaced by hot meals. finally, salad bar is added in the west of cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall change—the addition of outdoor seating—and report several important alterations, including the new coffee bar, takeaway area, salad bar, hot-meal counter and recycling bins. The comparison between the former staff rooms and the new food facilities is particularly relevant. This gives the response a clear overview and covers much of the plan. However, some details are incomplete or inaccurate: the barbecue is to the south-west, not the “east south,” and the outdoor area is described as “multiple” seating rather than specifying that it is outside along the southern wall. You also omit the new southern doors and do not mention that the toilets and central seating remain. More precise coverage of these features would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the former and current layouts. This makes the before-and-after comparison easy to follow. Sequencing words such as “In addition,” “Furthermore,” and “Currently” help connect the information, and the reader can generally understand which plan each detail refers to. However, the repeated use of “In addition” and “Finally” makes cohesion somewhat mechanical, while the list-like progression limits the sense of comparison between corresponding features. Some references are also unclear, as in “Besides it,” and inconsistent capitalisation after full stops interrupts the flow. Grouping changes by location or by what was replaced would create smoother progression and more flexible linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing a redesigned space, including “replacing,” “established,” “facilities,” and “recycling bins.” These choices communicate the main changes, and the meaning is generally clear. There are, however, several inaccurate or unnatural collocations and word forms: “multiple of outdoor seating,” “rooms for staff were existed,” and “the remaining of cafe” do not express the intended ideas naturally. “Reshaped” is understandable but less precise than language such as “redesigned,” and “east south” is an awkward directional phrase. Repeated use of “added,” “located,” and “in addition” also limits flexibility. More accurate collocations for map descriptions would improve precision and naturalness.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some sentence variety, including an overview sentence and longer sentences that connect changes with participle phrases, such as “replacing staff dining rooms.” However, grammatical control is uneven, and errors occur in basic sentence patterns as well as longer constructions. For example, “it can clearly seen” is missing “be,” while “two rooms for staff were existed” uses an incorrect passive form. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent in phrases such as “a recycling bins” and “south of cafe.” The final paragraph contains several sentence fragments or run-on list-like statements, and capitalisation after full stops is inconsistent. Practise accurate passive forms and article use, then check each sentence for a complete subject and verb.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.