Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Looking at both of the designs so the predesigned photo looks more simpler as comare to the post designed firstly we will summarize the pre designed one.Looking at the entrance point both looks quiet similiar and is absolutly no diffrerences,now looking and comparing both of bins so the post designed bin looks a bit more enlarged so that good point as well as its a recycling bin so its beneficial,now moving on to the menu table so in my perspective the predesigned looks far better and this perspective is only based on ease for the costumers so comparing both inplace of takeaway food and coffee bar staff dining rooms was far better option,kitchen looks fine now moving on to salad bar so that should haveb been in the same menu table and instead of that their should have been an extra chairs and tables.and now looking at the final phase of the cafe so the most precious thing to me is that open grounded chairs and tables that as an extra plus point in it.Now heading towards the final comparision so it a stall or table of Barbecue and for me its totally fine in that post designed cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several relevant changes, including the new takeaway and coffee-bar areas, the recycling bins, salad bar, outdoor seating and barbecue. However, the response is only partly focused on summarising the plans: it repeatedly gives personal opinions, such as saying the old staff dining rooms were “far better” and the barbecue is “totally fine,” rather than objectively describing the changes. Some details are also inaccurate or unclear: the plans show a bin replaced by recycling bins, not an enlarged bin, and the entrance is not the only feature that remains similar. To strengthen the response, give a concise overview of the main transformation, then accurately compare the layout and facilities without evaluating which design is preferable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: you move from the entrance and bins to the service areas, then to the outdoor facilities, and use signposts such as “now moving on” and “finally.” However, the response reads largely as one long sequence, with no clear paragraphing or overview to guide the reader. The repeated transitions (“now looking,” “moving on,” “now heading”) become mechanical, while links between ideas are sometimes unclear—for example, the shift from the salad bar to the suggestion for extra chairs. Group the changes into paragraphs, such as internal facilities and outdoor additions, and use comparisons to show how each area changed. A clear opening overview would also establish the main progression before the details.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some task-related vocabulary, including “recycling bin,” “takeaway food,” “coffee bar,” “salad bar” and “outdoor seating,” which helps identify several features. However, the range is limited and many expressions are informal, imprecise or awkward for an academic report. Phrases such as “precious thing to me,” “good point,” “menu table” and “open grounded chairs and tables” do not clearly describe the plan, and “enlarged” misrepresents the recycling-bin change. Spelling errors such as “similiar,” “diffrerences” and “comparision” are also noticeable. Use precise map vocabulary—such as “area,” “counter,” “facility” and “was replaced by”—and avoid personal or conversational wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, but these structures are often difficult to follow because of frequent errors in sentence boundaries, punctuation and grammatical patterns. For example, “Looking at both of the designs so the predesigned photo looks more simpler” joins ideas without a clear structure and uses an incorrect comparative form. In “both of bins,” the article and plural pattern are faulty, while “their should have been” has an incorrect subject form. Run-on sentences and missing punctuation also make relationships between clauses unclear. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses—for example, “The kitchen remains in the same position, while the former staff dining rooms have been replaced by a takeaway area and a coffee bar.”

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