Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The arrangement illustrate a college cafe how to look previously and after that it was renovated then how to look currently.

Cafe before redesign, it was small and well design. There were kitchen, serving area, staff dining rooms, bin and toilets. tables and chairs were placed among other cafe areas. Staff dining rooms were divided into two diffirant room. bin and toilets were placed one side of entrance.

On the other hand, cafe currently looks big and added with some new things. There are kitchen and toilets are locate same place. serving area and staff dining rooms convert into hot meals and take away food and also coffee bar areas. However, salad bar and barbecue are added in cafe; In addition, outdoor seating are also new construction.

overall , cafe are expand and they incoule some more facilities. they are modernise some areas in indoors and outdoors so recently cafe looks biggest than before.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation: the former serving area becomes a hot-meal counter, the staff dining rooms are replaced by takeaway and coffee facilities, and outdoor seating and a barbecue are added. You also note that the kitchen and toilets remain in place, giving the reader a useful comparison. However, some important details are only briefly mentioned or omitted: the salad bar is on the western wall, recycling bins replace the single bin, and the outdoor area has four tables. The claim that the café is “big” or has “expand[ed]” is not clearly supported by the plans, which show added facilities rather than a stated increase in the building’s size. A more precise overview and fuller description of the changes would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: it describes the former café, contrasts it with the current layout, and ends with an overview. This gives the information an overall coherent arrangement. The contrast marker “On the other hand” helps signal the move to the present plan, while “In addition” introduces another change. However, some links are mechanical or unclear, and the overview comes after a paragraph that already summarises changes. The sentence beginning “serving area and staff dining rooms convert into…” combines several changes in a way that is difficult to follow. Organise the details by location or by what stayed and changed, and use clearer references such as “the former staff rooms” to make relationships between features easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant layout vocabulary, including “serving area,” “staff dining rooms,” “outdoor seating,” and “facilities,” so the reader can understand the main subject. There are also attempts to describe change, such as “convert into” and “added.” However, several word choices and forms are inaccurate or unnatural, including “well design,” “new construction,” “incoule,” and “looks biggest.” “Among other cafe areas” is also vague for describing the central tables and chairs. These errors sometimes make the description less precise, although the main message remains understandable. Aim for accurate map language and natural collocations, for example, “was replaced by,” “was added,” and “is located.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally follow the comparison. However, grammatical control is uneven, particularly with verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction. For example, “The arrangement illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “There are kitchen and toilets are locate same place” combines two clause patterns and has an incorrect verb form. In “serving area and staff dining rooms convert into,” the past change is not expressed with an appropriate passive form. Articles and plurals also need attention, as in “There were kitchen.” Practise forming accurate past and present passive sentences to describe plan changes, and check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly conjugated verb.

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