Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The map illustrates, the information about a college cafe before it ws redesigned and looks it after the rebuilt.

Looking for an overall perspective, expalin the college cafe before redesined staff dinning room has been in the place of dinning room is take away food and and coffee bar secondely remove the serving area.

In the earlier map

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a limited attempt to describe the redesign, identifying that the former staff dining rooms became a takeaway-food area and coffee bar. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main changes or describe most of the plan: the new salad bar, outdoor seating and barbecue are omitted, as are features that remained, such as the kitchen and toilets. The phrase “remove the serving area” is also unclear because the hot-meals counter remains in the redesigned café. The response is substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the comparison incomplete. To improve, give an overview of the major changes, then describe the old and new layouts with accurate details and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a small amount of organisation: the opening refers to the two plans, and “Looking for an overall perspective” appears intended to introduce an overview. However, the ideas do not develop into a coherent account. The sentence about the staff dining rooms combines several changes without clear relationships, and “In the earlier map” begins a new section that is never completed. Linking expressions such as “secondely” are attempted, but they do not create a clear progression. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the main comparisons, and organise details by area—for example, changes inside the café followed by the new outdoor facilities. Complete each sentence and use clear references to the former and current plans.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a few task-relevant terms, including “college cafe,” “staff dinning room,” “take away food,” and “coffee bar,” so the reader can identify some of the features being compared. However, the vocabulary range is narrow, and several spelling errors or imprecise expressions make the description difficult to follow, such as “ws redesigned,” “redesined,” and “remove the serving area.” Some phrases are not natural for describing plans, including “looks it after the rebuilt.” Aim for accurate map vocabulary and consistent spelling. Useful terms include “was converted into,” “remained unchanged,” “was replaced by,” and “outdoor seating area”; these would help express the changes more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts to form longer sentences, but grammatical control is weak and the intended relationships between ideas are often unclear. For example, “The map illustrates, the information about a college cafe before it ws redesigned and looks it after the rebuilt” has an unnecessary comma and an incomplete, incorrectly structured comparison. In “staff dinning room has been in the place of dinning room is take away food,” the verb forms and sentence structure do not clearly express what replaced what. The final fragment, “In the earlier map,” is unfinished. Practise complete simple sentences first, using accurate past and present forms—for example, “The staff dining rooms were replaced by a takeaway area and a coffee bar”—before adding more complex comparisons.

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