Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Major changes can be observed in college cafe through these two diagrams before and after their renovation.

At first, major change that can be observed is the outdoor seating arrangements and the barbecue after the rennovation of collage cafe. In addition to that , Staff dining rooms are replaced by Take away food and coffee bar . In addition to that ,Bin is converted into Recycling bins and serving area is replaced by hot meals after the redesign of college cafe.Moreover, Salad bar also get a place in college cafe after rennovation.

However, somethings remain at their place like as they were before cafe renovation.These things include kitchen, tables and chairs and toilets.

Kitchen is present at the north-west side of the cafe , tables and chairs are in the middle whereas, toilets are at the bottom of the cafe right beside bins.

In conclusion, major changes has been observed in cafe after rennovation

while some of the things remain at their place before and after the renovation of cafe design.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main contrast between the original café and its redesigned version, including the new outdoor seating and barbecue, the replacement of the staff dining rooms, and the addition of a salad bar. You also correctly note that the kitchen, central tables and chairs, and toilets remain. This covers the key changes, but some details are less fully reported: for example, the new southern doors and the four outdoor tables are omitted, and the location of the barbecue is not specified. The final location statement is also inaccurate: the toilets are in the bottom-right corner, but the bins are on the eastern wall, not directly beside them. A more precise overview and clearer spatial comparisons would make the account more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph describing changes, a paragraph on features that remain, and a conclusion. This gives the reader an overall route through the information. However, progression within the changes paragraph is somewhat list-like, and repeated links such as “In addition to that” make the connections mechanical. The opening and conclusion also repeat the general idea that changes occurred without adding much information. Some punctuation spacing and sentence boundaries interrupt the flow. Grouping the changes by area—for example, north wall, western/eastern sides, and outdoor space—and using clearer comparisons would create smoother progression and more effective cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “outdoor seating,” “barbecue,” “recycling bins,” “serving area,” and “redesign,” so the main features are generally understandable. However, the range is somewhat repetitive, especially with repeated uses of “major changes,” “cafe,” and “renovation.” Some choices are imprecise or unnatural, such as “get a place” and “converted into” when describing a replacement. Spelling errors in “rennovation” and “collage” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise verbs and collocations for describing plans, such as “was added,” “was replaced by,” and “remained unchanged,” while checking spelling and avoiding repeated wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is an attempt to use both simple statements and more complex structures, including “However, some things remain…” and the contrast introduced by “whereas.” Most of the intended meaning is clear, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “major changes has been observed” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Staff dining rooms are replaced” uses an unsuitable tense for a completed redesign. Articles and sentence construction also need attention in “Major changes can be observed in college cafe” and “like as they were before.” Punctuation is inconsistent, with extra spaces before commas and full stops. Use past forms consistently when describing the redesign and check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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