Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given maps illustrates the designs of cafeteria before redesigning and today's design. There are major changings in serving area, outdoor seating, Salad bar and Barbecue. The other design of cafeteria remained almost change.

Before redesigning there was separate Staff dinning area inside the café with no outdoor seating and separate sections for Salad bar and Barbecue. It was quite simple and spacious from inside. But after designing, the Staff dinning area was replaced with separate section of take way and cafe bar. Hot meals shop was constructed in place of serving area. Salad bar was constructed on the left side of cafe that is opposite to recycle bin and barbecue shop was built near Outside seating with cafe's wall. The place of kitchen, bin, tables, chairs and toilet existed in same place.

Before redesiging cafe was quite simpleand offer less facilities but today's café is more attractive with lot of modern facilities like take way,Barbecue shop and seating area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the replacement of the staff dining rooms with takeaway and coffee-bar sections, the new hot-meals counter, and the addition of outdoor seating and a barbecue. You also note that the kitchen, central tables, toilets and eastern waste area remain in place. This gives the reader a relevant comparison of the two plans. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the original café did not have separate salad-bar or barbecue sections, and the barbecue is an area outside rather than a shop. The overview that the café is “more attractive” is subjective; a clearer summary would emphasise the expansion of food facilities and the new outdoor area. Some features, such as the new southern doors and recycling bins, could be reported more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph comparing the plans, and a concluding overview. The sequence from the original layout to the redesigned café is generally easy to follow, and contrast markers such as “Before” and “But after” help signal change. However, the first paragraph lists changes without clearly grouping them, while the second combines several different points in long sentences. Some references are also unclear, particularly “The other design of cafeteria remained almost change” and “The place of kitchen, bin, tables, chairs and toilet existed in same place.” Organising the comparison into internal changes and additions outside, and using clearer links such as “Meanwhile” or “In addition,” would make progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “replaced,” “constructed,” “opposite,” and “remained,” and the reader can understand the main changes. There is also some variety in how you refer to the facilities. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “major changings,” “separate Staff dinning area,” “take way,” and “Barbecue shop.” Spelling and word forms such as “redesiging,” “simpleand,” and “dinning” also reduce precision. Aim for standard plan-description terms and consistent spelling, for example “changes,” “staff dining rooms,” “takeaway counter,” and “barbecue area.” This would make the vocabulary more accurate and natural without requiring more complicated words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple statements and more complex comparisons, as in “But after designing, the Staff dinning area was replaced…” and “The place of kitchen, bin, tables, chairs and toilet existed in same place.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. The opening needs subject–verb agreement (“maps illustrate”), and several noun phrases need articles or more natural plural forms, such as “the kitchen” and “the toilets.” Tense and sentence construction also need attention: “The other design … remained almost change” does not form a clear grammatical statement. Review articles, agreement, and past-tense phrasing, and use full stops to separate the many changes currently joined in long sentences.

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