Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illustrate the design of the cafe before and what's the changes now occur in the cafe . The entrance and the exit door still remain on the top right corner of the cafe there no change occur but the change occur in the kitchen the is on the top left side but the soft drink area of the kitchen now redesign and convert into the hot meals . The staff dining room redesign into the take away and the coffee bar area the table and the area still remain in the same position as it design . But the one change occur inside of the cafe is salad bar is added on the bottum left side . Toilet remain the same as it desing before . But the changes also occur in the outside the outdoor sitting is redesign and one big redesign that the barbecue area is also redesign that's the major redesign changes occour in the cafe

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the conversion of the former staff dining rooms into takeaway and coffee areas, the addition of a salad bar, and the new outdoor seating and barbecue. You also note that the kitchen and toilets remain in place. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the salad bar is on the western wall, not specifically the bottom-left, and the outdoor seating is added rather than described as redesigned. The account also omits the recycling bins replacing the single bin and does not clearly explain that the central tables and chairs remain. A clearer overview of the main changes, followed by accurate comparisons of the interior and exterior, would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly sensible order, moving from the entrance and kitchen to the former staff rooms, seating, toilets, and outdoor area. This helps the reader identify the features being compared. However, the information is presented as one long paragraph, and the repeated pattern of “the change occur” makes the progression feel repetitive rather than clearly organised. Some links between ideas are also difficult to follow, particularly “but the soft drink area of the kitchen now redesign” and the final sentence about the barbecue. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the main details, and group unchanged features separately from additions and conversions. More precise linking phrases would make the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “entrance,” “kitchen,” “staff dining room,” “salad bar,” and “outdoor sitting.” These terms show that you can identify the main facilities. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or repeated: “redesign” is used for different kinds of change, while “one big redesign” does not clearly describe a specific feature. There are also spelling errors such as “bottum” and “occour,” and “soft drink area” is not supported by the plan, which labels the former counter as a serving area. Choose more exact terms for conversions, additions, and unchanged features, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect several ideas in longer sentences, for example by using “but” and “and,” and the reader can generally recognise the features you are describing. However, sentence structures are limited and many clauses are not grammatically complete or well controlled. Examples include “The pie chart illustrate,” “there no change occur,” and “the table and the area still remain in the same position as it design.” These show problems with subject–verb agreement, missing verbs or auxiliaries, and tense. Punctuation is also weak, with several ideas joined into long sentences. Practise forming clear past-tense comparison sentences, such as “The kitchen remained in the same position, but its counter was changed to serve hot meals,” and use full stops to separate details.

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