Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plan displays a college cafe before and how it looked now after redesigned.There were constructed an outdoor seating now and added an barbecue place.

Overall,in old cafe there is no storage for salad bar,and the staff dining room can be replaced by two thing one is take away food counter or other is cafe bar.Moreover,serving area can be removed from the cafe and placed hot meal at their place.Sitting area, kitchen,toilets and bin are present at the same place after only a few modifications.As the Staff dining rooms are in present at the entrance of cafe and sitting area is at the right side,toilets are placed at the corner and a bin is nera it.but after redesigned the coffee bar and take away corner are at the entrance of cafe and at the end there are a salad bar and at the right side hot meals and kitchen are present,and add two more gates for the cafe one near Barbecue and other is near toilets

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the new outdoor seating and barbecue, the replacement of the staff dining rooms with takeaway and coffee facilities, and the change from a general serving area to hot meals. You also note that the kitchen and toilets remain. This gives the reader a relevant comparison of the two plans. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the salad bar is on the western wall, not “at the end,” and the new doors lead to the outdoor seating rather than one being near the barbecue and the other near the toilets. The overview also says there is “no storage for salad bar,” which does not clearly describe the change. More precise descriptions of locations and a clearer summary of the main redesign would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response includes an opening, an overview, and further comparisons, so there is some organisation. Linking expressions such as “Overall” and “Moreover” help signal relationships between points. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several changes and locations are packed into long sentences, especially the final sentence beginning “but after redesigned.” The contrast between the old and new layouts is not consistently signposted, and references such as “their place” and “at the end” are unclear. Organise the details into a clear sequence—for example, changes to the north and west sides, then the eastern and southern areas—and use separate sentences for distinct features. This would make the comparison easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “staff dining rooms,” “serving area,” “take away food,” “coffee bar,” and “outdoor seating,” which allows you to report several features of the plans. There are also attempts to describe change with phrases such as “replaced” and “removed.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear: “two thing,” “storage for salad bar,” “barbecue place,” and “gates for the cafe” do not express the intended features precisely. Spelling errors such as “nera” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of terms for plan descriptions, such as “counter,” “section,” “entrance,” and “located along,” and check spelling and plural forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, and the reader can generally identify the main comparison. However, grammatical control is uneven, particularly in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries. For example, “There were constructed an outdoor seating now” has an incorrect passive construction, while “the staff dining room can be replaced” uses an unsuitable tense for describing a completed redesign. The final sentence joins many ideas with commas and “and,” making the relationships difficult to follow. Use past and present forms consistently to contrast the former and current plans, and divide long descriptions into shorter sentences. Check article use and agreement, as in “a barbecue” and “the staff dining rooms are.”

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