Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often argued that in this modern technology oriented era, the old fashioned way to watch movies and plays are no longer vital as nowadays people watch any kind of entertainment they look for online. On the one hand, others debate that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally. Although in my opinion the people who think that in this digital era these old sources are no longer beneficial are correct because people think if they go physically it will be waste of time and money too. On the other hand, who thinks theatres and cinemas are still crucial for economically and culturally wrong because now most people watch online and even now companies are focusing to capture more online audience.

First of all the major reason why these old entertainment sources are no more crucial is the consumption of time and extra cost. If people will go physically to watch movies or play, first they will travel towards the spot then they will buy ticket and watch it. However, if they watch online no extra travel time, no ticket cost and no additional cost such as people need to pay if tickets were not available. The people just open their devices such as mobile phones or laptop and open streaming platform like netflix, geo hotstar, aryplus and many more for watching not only movies and theatres but also many other things. Overall, watching online is more reliable option in which no extra time, no restrictions on what to watch and no extra cost of tickets but only little fee of monthly subscription with unlimited which is far lower than the one ticket for one time use only.

Furthermore, the people who believe that visiting theatres and cinemas are still significant financally and culturally are on wrong path. The reason why it is not possible is the companies who produced the movies, dramas and other things are focusing on digital platforms and subscription based models. The online advance pyment they will get is more easy than the previous method in which a lot of member involved. They will get evrything without pying to anyone which means they holds 100% shares. For instance, in my country a new platform aryplus introduced for dramas and people pying for it in advannce to watch. If we talk about theatres they also record all plays and uplod it on social media platforms. The culture of going into these areas are no longer exist but i think we should do some work on it, although it is not important.

In conclusion, it is evident that the benefits of watching online are more so people who think about this rae correct. While who thinks it good are proved it not

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a clear preference for online entertainment, and your first body paragraph gives relevant reasons: avoiding travel and ticket costs, with streaming services as examples. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the case for theatres’ and cinemas’ economic and cultural importance is not fairly explained. Instead, you dismiss it as “on wrong path” and argue that companies are moving online; this does not address wider economic effects or the cultural value of shared, live experiences. Your position also becomes unclear when you say “we should do some work on it” before concluding that online viewing is better. Develop both sides with specific support and state your opinion consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “First of all” and “Furthermore” help identify the main sections. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the second body paragraph moves from companies’ payment models to shares, a platform example and recorded plays without clearly connecting these points to cultural or economic importance. Linking phrases are sometimes mechanical or confusing, particularly “On the one hand” followed by “On the other hand” in the introduction, where the contrast is not clearly organised. The conclusion is also incomplete and does not clearly summarise the discussion. Use topic sentences, connect each example directly to its point, and make the final paragraph a complete summary.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “streaming platform,” “subscription-based models,” “audience” and “culturally,” so the reader can follow the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making ideas harder to understand. For example, “old sources,” “on wrong path,” and “holds 100% shares” do not express the intended points naturally. Spelling errors such as “financally,” “advannce” and “uplod” are also noticeable. Aim for precise terms for the two sides of the debate, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More accurate phrasing would make your argument clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and clauses, for example, “Although in my opinion…” and “The reason why it is not possible is…,” but these structures are often faulty, and the range remains limited. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in “the old fashioned way … are no longer vital,” “If people will go,” and “they holds 100% shares.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: the opening paragraph contains several ideas joined into a long, confusing sentence, while the final sentence is incomplete. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, conditional forms, and whether each sentence has a complete main clause.

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