Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no loner important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. At my opinion it is right, because in know digital age every one have own mobile and also internet asses in every ways . Every one hav own choice what they wantm, and in what they are interested like, some people watch move , some like dramas. Every one can easly watch easly. But in theatres we watch movies or dramas together. In old age someone wants to watch move they first take a ticket of cinema and that go on time , for example when you are late so you can miss the move or first part, But now days you can easly watch your own choice moves in every time and every wear.

But the other side some people are agrue that thearthes and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally. The are also right because in old age people are

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a position—“it is right” that online entertainment has made cinemas less important—and give relevant points about convenience and choosing what to watch. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: the economic and cultural case is introduced but not explained, and the essay ends mid-sentence (“in old age people are”). There is no developed comparison or supporting example, so the discussion and your opinion remain incomplete. The response contains 136 words, which is 114 words below the 250-word minimum; 33 words copied from the prompt were excluded from that count. To improve, explain both viewpoints, develop your own position, and support each main idea with a specific example before writing a conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response around the two views: the first paragraph discusses online viewing, and “But the other side” signals a shift to the opposing argument. This gives the reader some sense of direction. However, the progression is limited because the second view stops almost immediately, and the essay has no conclusion. Several ideas are joined in a long sequence with repeated “every one” and “but,” while references such as “they” in “they first take a ticket” are not always smoothly connected to the surrounding point. Use separate, complete paragraphs for each view, link each claim to its explanation or example, and finish by restating your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the basic contrast, including “digital age,” “internet,” “choice,” “cinema,” and “economically and culturally.” The reader can generally identify your intended meaning despite frequent spelling errors and some awkward or repeated expressions. For example, “watch easly watch easly” repeats the same idea, and “in every time and every wear” does not express the intended meaning naturally. Some words are also too general to explain the arguments in detail. Build a more precise range for this topic, such as language for convenience, shared experiences, employment, and cultural identity, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional example beginning “when you are late,” and the main point is often understandable. However, control of sentence structure and basic forms is inconsistent. Examples include “every one have own mobile,” “in what they are interested like,” and “when you are late so you can miss the move,” where agreement, sentence construction, or clause linking is faulty. The final sentence is incomplete, which also prevents the opposing argument from being expressed. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles and possessives, and make sure each sentence has a complete main clause. Shorter, correctly formed sentences would help you communicate your ideas more clearly.

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