Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
A few people say that in the technological era, theatres and cinemas have been superseded as people can enjoy all movies and series they want online. While others believe that theatres and cinemas are still important by both economy and culture. The technology for theatres and cinemas is is old and now we can can watch anything online using internet .
Firstly, a few persons consider that theatres and cinemas are no longer important as we can watch every movies or series online . The technology used in theatres and cinemas is old and now in the digital era , everyone can watch all the entertainment online on mobile phones or tv. We can watch everything sitting at home and we dont need to go theatres or cinemas . Moreover, in theatres and cinemas we have to buy a ticket to sit in the hall to watch something but digitally we can watch everything sitting at home online.
On the other hand, many people believe that theatres and cinemas are still important as they were important in past days both economically and culturally. a few persons consider that theatres and cinemas are still important as they were in old days by both economy and culture. They believe that watcing movies in theatres and cinemas is more entertaining and jofull than watching online on mobile phones. According to those people, watching movies or series online is not entertaining like in theatres and cinemas.
In my opinion, the oppurtunity to watch all the entertainment online is far better than watching movies in theatres and cinemas.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You present a clear opinion that online entertainment is preferable, and you mention both the view that online access makes venues less necessary and the opposing view that cinemas offer a more enjoyable experience. However, the discussion is only partial: the economic and cultural importance named in the prompt is not explained, and the two sides are not developed with specific reasons or examples. The claim that venues are “important in past days” is repeated rather than supported, while the online side mainly focuses on convenience and ticket costs. The response therefore addresses the task only in a limited way. To strengthen it, explain concrete economic and cultural contributions, develop the online argument, and support both sides with relevant examples.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a concluding opinion. “Firstly” and “On the other hand” help signal the change in perspective, so the reader can follow the broad direction. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and ideas are often repeated rather than extended. For example, the claim that theatres are still important “as they were in old days” appears twice in the same paragraph, while the conclusion simply restates the preference for online entertainment. Some linking and punctuation are also awkward, such as the opening contrast beginning “While others believe” as a separate sentence. Use each paragraph to develop a distinct reason, connect claims to explanations or examples, and make the conclusion synthesise the discussion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main subject, including “digital era,” “online,” “mobile phones,” and “ticket.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, particularly “theatres and cinemas” and “watch everything online.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “important by both economy and culture,” “every movies,” and “more entertaining and jofull.” Spelling errors including “watcing” and “oppurtunity” also reduce accuracy. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the general message, but they make the writing less precise. Build a wider set of expressions for cultural value, employment, revenue, convenience, and shared experiences, and check spelling and word forms carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You communicate mainly through simple sentences and make an attempt at a complex contrast in “While others believe…,” but the range of sentence structures is limited. Errors occur frequently in sentence formation and grammatical patterns. For example, “While others believe…” is a fragment, “we can can watch” repeats the modal, and “we dont need to go theatres” is missing a required preposition and has an uncontracted negative. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and agreement in “every movies” and “the technology … is is old.” Punctuation spacing and sentence boundaries are inconsistent. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex forms using clauses such as “although” and “because”; proofread for repeated words, articles, plurals, and punctuation.
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