Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, most of the people are depending on online platforms for entertainment purpose and they do not depend on theatres and cinemas. Other argue that economically and culturally theatres and cinemas are most important to digital life. In my point of view the movies and theatres are more entertaining part of everyones life so thats why these are still important for future generation.

Firstly, In this modern life there will be no need of theatres because of all the tv shows and entertainment programmes are get into the online. Moreover, lot of dvd prints and otts are damage the culture of movie theatres. For instance, one of the famous movie named as jailer it is very popular in south side of india

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You introduce both viewpoints and state a personal position: you argue that theatres and cinemas remain important, while also noting that online entertainment may reduce the need for them. However, the response addresses the task only minimally. The economic and cultural importance mentioned in the prompt is not explained, and the opposing view is only briefly asserted rather than supported with reasons. The example of the film “Jailer” is unfinished and does not show how cinemas matter economically or culturally. The response is also 128 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to develop the discussion. To improve, explain each view with a clear reason and a relevant example, then support your own opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph gives your position, and “Firstly” introduces a point about online entertainment. This provides a starting structure, but the ideas are not arranged into a complete, coherent discussion. The first body point is not fully explained, the example about “Jailer” stops abruptly, and there is no developed paragraph presenting the opposing view or a conclusion. Linking is also limited, with “Moreover” adding another claim without clarifying its relationship to the first. Build a clear sequence of paragraphs—one for each view and one for your opinion—and use linking phrases to show contrast, cause, and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is basic but includes some relevant topic language, such as “online platforms,” “entertainment programmes,” “culture,” and “future generation.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate or awkward expressions make parts of the message difficult to interpret, including “damage the culture of movie theatres” and “are get into the online.” Some phrases are also repetitive, particularly references to theatres, cinemas, and entertainment. Aim for more precise language to explain the ideas, such as “streaming services,” “cinema attendance,” and “cultural experience.” Check collocations and spelling as well: “DVD releases” is clearer than “dvd prints,” and “everyone’s” needs an apostrophe.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the opening includes a contrast between people who use online platforms and those who support cinemas. However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, and articles. For example, “most of the people are depending” is an awkward tense construction, while “all the tv shows and entertainment programmes are get into the online” has an incorrect verb pattern that obscures the meaning. “Other argue” also lacks subject–verb agreement, and “the movies and theatres are more entertaining part” has problems with number and article use. Practise accurate basic clauses first, then add complex sentences using clear patterns such as “Although…, …” and “This is because…”.

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