Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Some argue that in this modern era, people donot value theaters and cinemas because they are more comfortable watching entertainment via online platforms. Others say that
no becz..internet vast amount of info..easily accessible ..not planning time. they caanot enjoy visually as they enjoy in front
imp becz.. these theaters need people to visit itherwise they become close..cost of theater cover its expenses .theaters revive the cukture identity for tourism
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response identifies both sides of the discussion: online entertainment is described as convenient, while theatres are said to need visitors and to support cultural identity and tourism. These points are relevant, but they are presented as fragments rather than explained arguments, and there are no examples or supporting details. The opening sentence begins to introduce the online view but is left unfinished, and the response does not state a clear personal opinion, despite the task asking for one. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words, so it cannot develop the discussion adequately. To improve, complete the introduction, explain each view with reasons and examples, and give a direct, consistent opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
There is a basic attempt to separate ideas, using notes such as “no becz..” and “imp becz..” to signal opposing points. However, the response does not form a complete essay: the opening thought ends abruptly at “Others say that,” and the remaining ideas are disconnected notes rather than developed paragraphs. Relationships between claims are therefore difficult to follow, and there is no conclusion to bring the discussion together. The reader can identify a few intended points, but progression is not established. Organise the answer into an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion; use complete sentences and clear linking phrases to show how each reason supports your position.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The response includes some relevant topic vocabulary, including “online platforms,” “visually,” “expenses,” “culture identity,” and “tourism,” which shows an attempt to discuss access and the cultural and economic roles of venues. However, the range is limited by the very short, note-like response, and several choices or spellings are inaccurate or unclear, such as “donot,” “caanot,” “itherwise,” and “cukture.” “Theaters” is understandable, though consistent spelling and more precise phrasing would improve control. Build a fuller range around convenience, shared viewing, local employment, and cultural heritage, and check spelling and collocations before submitting. For example, “revive the culture identity” could be expressed more naturally as “preserve cultural heritage.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
There is a basic attempt at a complex sentence in “Some argue that … because they are more comfortable watching entertainment via online platforms,” and this opening is mostly understandable. However, the response provides too little connected prose to demonstrate a range of sentence structures, and the unfinished clause “Others say that” leaves the opening sentence incomplete. The later notes lack complete grammatical structures, for example “internet vast amount of info” and “cost of theater cover its expenses”; these do not clearly establish subjects, verbs, and relationships. Use complete sentences with a subject and finite verb, check agreement and articles, and vary simple sentences with clauses explaining reasons. Proofread punctuation so that ideas are not left as fragments.
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