Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In recent years, there has been a noticeable trend of individuals they say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertaining thing they want on internet whereas others argue that theaters and cinemas are still very important both economically and culturally.

Firstly, cinema and theatres are good way of entertainment which gives a chance people enjoy there time and refresh themselves. Although in this ineternet worlds entertainment stuff is very accesable but going out and planing with friends and then fun outside from room can refresh brain differently.

secondly, us

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response introduces the topic and gives one relevant reason cinemas can remain valuable: going out with friends may provide a different kind of refreshment from online entertainment. However, it does not meaningfully discuss the opposing view that online entertainment makes theatres less important, nor does it address their economic or cultural importance. The phrase “secondly, us” begins another point but leaves it unfinished, and there is no clear, developed opinion or conclusion. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words: it contains 82 words, with 19 words copied from the prompt excluded. To improve, cover both views, state your position clearly, and support each main idea with explanation or an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces the issue, and “Firstly” signals a supporting point. The contrast marker “whereas” also indicates that two positions exist. However, the essay does not progress beyond its first supporting idea; “secondly, us” is incomplete and leaves the reader without a connected next point or conclusion. The opening sentence is overloaded, combining the topic and both views without a clear structure, while the relationship between online access and the benefit of going out is only loosely explained. Use separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, and connect each point with clear explanation rather than relying mainly on sequence markers.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “digital age,” “entertainment,” “economically,” and “culturally,” so the subject is generally recognisable. There are also attempts to express ideas beyond very basic statements, such as “refresh themselves” and “refresh brain differently.” However, vocabulary is limited and several choices or spellings reduce naturalness, including “entertaining thing,” “ineternet worlds,” “accesable,” and “fun outside from room.” Some phrases are difficult to interpret precisely. Build a wider range of accurate expressions for discussing online access, shared experiences, cultural value, and employment or revenue, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use a complex opening sentence with “whereas,” and the response also includes a subordinate clause beginning “Although.” These show some willingness to vary sentence structure. However, control is inconsistent: “there has been a noticeable trend of individuals they say” contains an unclear clause structure, and “which gives a chance people enjoy there time” is missing grammatical elements. In “going out and planing with friends and then fun outside from room can refresh brain,” the subject and verb pattern is difficult to follow. Articles, pronouns, and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses, checking that each sentence has a clear subject and complete verb.

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